TOEFL integrated writing: Altruism.

The lecturer talks about behaviours of meerkats who lives in the Africa which is very different and inaccurate stated in the reading passage. The speaker says that meerkats do not scarify for others their food.

First, the author claims that meerkats scarify their food for others when they stand as guard to watch predators because they have to run without food. However, the lecture contradicts this view point by saying that meerkats eat food before standing for other meerkats when they eat food so if predators attract on them then they do not run without food because they already have a full tommy of food.

Second, the article says that after getting alarm meerkats have to run the alone which is not safe for them and they can have stuck in the trouble. In contrary, the lecture does not agree with this statement and he says that after getting alarm meerkats get together then they can run together because they are safe and they can escape easily.

Third, the reading passage talks about reward for human ‘s scarification for others. On the other hand, the speaker posits this view and he says that human gets nothing for their scarification. For example, if anybody donate their kidney to relatives or others then donator do not get any reward or any other appreciation from them or society.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...peaker says that meerkats do not scarify for others their food. First, the aut...
^^^
Line 8, column 162, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'gets'' or 'get's'?
Suggestion: gets'; get's
...posits this view and he says that human gets nothing for their scarification. For ex...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, then, third, for example, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1097.0 1373.03311258 80% => OK
No of words: 225.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87555555556 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23447289887 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 145.348785872 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497777777778 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 326.7 419.366225166 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1142511113 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.888888889 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 21.698381199 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.42419426049 88% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 63.6247240618 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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