TOEFL integrated writing: Chevalier de Seingalt
The article claims that some critics had doubts about the accuracy of the Chevalier's memoir. Furthermore, they explain their claims
by providing three reasons for support. However, the lecturer explains that the accuracy of chevalier's memoir is correct and refutes each of the three reasons pointed out by the critics.
Firstly, the critics posit that if Chevaliar was a wealthy man and had spent more money on parties and gambling then what was the need to borrow money from
a Swiss merchant. The lecturer explains this by saying that Chevalier would've been in the need for urgent money and it does take a while to sell his assets and get the money, whereby he had no option but to take a loan. But, this doesn't mean that he wasn't wealthy.
Secondly, the critics doubt the accuracy of the conversation between Chevalier and Voltaire. They also feel that since memoir was written several years back, it's quite difficult to trust the accuracy of the actual conversation. However, the lecturer refutes this by saying that Chevalier used to write down everything about the conversation on the same day and also kept the notes for several years thereby referring it while writing the memoir. Additionally, she says that many people during Chevalier's era agreed on this.
Thirdly, the critics asserts that Chevalier's escape from Venetian prison by using a piece of metal to make a hole in
the ceiling and climbing through the roof didn't sound genuine because they feel that he could've bribed the prisoners
and escaped instead since he had a number of well-connected friends from Venice who could've paid the bribe. In contrast to this, the lecturer says that there were many people in prison who had more influential friends if that's the case why couldn't they escape. Furthermore, sources from old Venetian people reveal that the prison's ceiling had to be repaired.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: would've
... explains this by saying that Chevalier wouldve been in the need for urgent money and i...
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Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: VB_A_WHILE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'take awhile'?
Suggestion: take awhile
...n the need for urgent money and it does take a while to sell his assets and get the money, w...
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Line 5, column 231, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...no option but to take a loan. But, this doesnt mean that he wasnt wealthy. Secondly...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 251, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...e a loan. But, this doesnt mean that he wasnt wealthy. Secondly, the critics doubt...
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Line 9, column 117, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...using a piece of metal to make a hole in the ceiling and climbing through the roo...
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Line 10, column 43, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e ceiling and climbing through the roof didnt sound genuine because they feel that he...
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Line 11, column 222, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...son who had more influential friends if thats the case why couldnt they escape. Furth...
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Line 11, column 241, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...fluential friends if thats the case why couldnt they escape. Furthermore, sources from ...
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Line 11, column 324, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'prisons'' or 'prison's'?
Suggestion: prisons'; prison's
...rom old Venetian people reveal that the prisons ceiling had to be repaired.
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Line 11, column 360, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the prisons ceiling had to be repaired.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, while, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 313.0 270.72406181 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99680511182 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4687122371 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536741214058 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.4280997924 49.2860985944 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.307692308 110.228320801 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5384615385 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.09492273731 195% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0682367207845 0.272083759551 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0298852446516 0.0996497079465 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0304223555914 0.0662205650399 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.033154601994 0.162205337803 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277850939834 0.0443174109184 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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