TOEFL TPO 08 - Integrated Writing Task
The article claims that some critics had doubts about the accuracy of the Chevalier's memoir. Furthermore, they explain their claims by providing three reasons for support. However, the lecturer explains that the accuracy of chevalier's memoir is correct and refutes each of the three reasons pointed out by the critics.
Firstly, the critics posit that if Chevaliar was a wealthy man and had spent more money on parties and gambling then what was the need to borrow money from a Swiss merchant. The lecturer explains this by saying that Chevalier would've been in the need for urgent money and it does take a while to sell his assets and get the money, whereby he had no option but to take a loan. But, this doesn't mean that he wasn't wealthy.
Secondly, the critics doubt the accuracy of the conversation between Chevalier and Voltaire. They also feel that since memoir was written several years back, it's quite difficult to trust the accuracy of the actual conversation. However, the lecturer refutes this by saying that Chevalier used to write down everything about the conversation on the same day and also kept the notes for several years thereby referring it while writing the memoir. Additionally, she says that many people during Chevalier's era agreed on this.
Thirdly, the critics asserts that Chevalier's escape from Venetian prison by using a piece of metal to make a hole in the ceiling and climbing through the roof didn't sound genuine because they feel that he could've bribed the prisoners and escaped instead since he had a number of well-connected friends from Venice who could've paid the bribe. In contrast to this, the lecturer says that there were many people in prison who had more influential friends if that's the case why couldn't they escape. Furthermore, sources from old Venetian people reveal that the prison's ceiling had to be repaired.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: VB_A_WHILE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'take awhile'?
Suggestion: take awhile
...n the need for urgent money and it does take a while to sell his assets and get the money, w...
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Line 7, column 636, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ison apos;s ceiling had to be repaired.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, while, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 328.0 270.72406181 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95426829268 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35479365715 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512195121951 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.1982756372 49.2860985944 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2307692308 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5384615385 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396651478471 0.272083759551 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158226669903 0.0996497079465 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921700060601 0.0662205650399 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252729988583 0.162205337803 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386457202179 0.0443174109184 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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