TOEFL integrated writing: Dutch painter Rembrandt

The reading and the lecture are both about a painting known as portrait of an elderly woman in a white bonnet. while the author of the reading claim that this painting is not a work of Rembrandt. the authors gives three reasons for the claim, the lecturer however, challenges the reading by further addressing the issues brought up by the reading.

To begin with, the reading mention that there is inconsistensy about the women in the painting, she is wearing a servent cap and coat which has a luxurious fur collar. the author says that Rembrandt is known for his attention to details, the lecturer challenge this by stating that the fur collar were added after and in fact, the collar was painter over a simple white collar which is in cosistens with a servent clothing.

Secondly, the author expands by stating that since Rembrandt was a master of painting light and shadow, those element do not fit togather in this painting. the face of the women in the painting is illuminated from below, which something is not possible whith the fur coller she had, this also accordaing to the lecturer is due to the addtiong of the collar after the original painting was completed, further more when experts erased the fur collar the light and shadows were in perfect fit as expected from a Rembrandt painting.

Finally, the reading posits that once the painting was examind from behind it turned out that it was painted on a wood panels that were gloued togather, something which is unusuall from Rembrandt. the lecturer howvere stated that the wood were added after, in fact, the original painting was painted on a single wood panel and later they found that the original panel came from the same tree of another painting from the same artist.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
... of an elderly woman in a white bonnet. while the author of the reading claim that th...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “while” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... of an elderly woman in a white bonnet. while the author of the reading claim that th...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...is painting is not a work of Rembrandt. the authors gives three reasons for the cla...
^^^
Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'give'.
Suggestion: give
...is not a work of Rembrandt. the authors gives three reasons for the claim, the lectur...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... coat which has a luxurious fur collar. the author says that Rembrandt is known for...
^^^
Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this element' or 'those elements'?
Suggestion: this element; those elements
... a master of painting light and shadow, those element do not fit togather in this painting. t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 157, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...t do not fit togather in this painting. the face of the women in the painting is il...
^^^
Line 7, column 198, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...thing which is unusuall from Rembrandt. the lecturer howvere stated that the wood w...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, second, secondly, so, while, in fact, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78476821192 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37771632721 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473509933775 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 429.3 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 21.2450331126 155% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.9102188412 49.2860985944 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.555555556 110.228320801 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5555555556 21.698381199 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0576322981432 0.272083759551 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0308671996151 0.0996497079465 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310886172009 0.0662205650399 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0385504437313 0.162205337803 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136237028721 0.0443174109184 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.3589403974 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 53.8541721854 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.498013245 145% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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