TOEFL integrated writing: The sea otter

As asserted rightly in the context, there are concerns for decline in sea otter poppulation in western coast of North America. There were some of the possible reasons listed in the paragraph, like it can be due to rapidly increasing polution in near by areas or increase in number of abnoxious predators. Detailed anaysis is cogently made in context abvocating that rapidly increasing pollution would rather be possible reason for deplete in popullation. Apart from the context, Speaker has made some cogent remarks on facts which gives convinving reason to get concreate conclusion.
Firslty, it is stated in paragraph that pollution would be one of the lethal reason for deplete in otter poppulation, as there are number of oil rigs and chemical industries near to affected coast. The water sample was duly analyzed and it was enough deadly to break the resistance of otters and thus would lead to lifethreatening infections and kill them. But, speaker has contradicted this statement stating that there were not otter corpse washed away on sea shore in any time during that regime. Thus it leads, that predator would had been possible options for the deplete.

Secondly, apart from the rate of decline of otter poppulation, there were parallely decline in number of other water species as sea lions and seals. so context is backing the surmise that water pollution has not limited the infecton to otter speacies but had also has affected other species. But speaker makes cogent contradiction that Orca whale which feeds on smaller whale, is possibly starving as whale on which they feed are being vanished from the areas nearby as due to human presence. So possibly orca have change the food chain and now feed on smaller mammals like sea lion and otters.

Lastly, asserted in context that above mentioned hyposthesis would explain the possible reason for deplete in other areas too, where we have uneven decline in otter population. But speaker has very kind remark to it stating that decline would rather not depend to things stated in context and as otter usually leave on shallow water in alakan areas where orca which is giant mammal would not able to easily come for hunting.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...tern coast of North America. There were some of the possible reasons listed in the paragrap...
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Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...e due to rapidly increasing polution in near by areas or increase in number of abnoxiou...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 500, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...a shore in any time during that regime. Thus it leads, that predator would had been ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 565, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...tor would had been possible options for the deplete. Secondly, apart from the rate of de...
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Line 4, column 150, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...r water species as sea lions and seals. so context is backing the surmise that wat...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, thus, apart from, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 30.3222958057 168% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1373.03311258 133% => OK
No of words: 365.0 270.72406181 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01643835616 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47609096339 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 145.348785872 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504109589041 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 419.366225166 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.5586627429 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.785714286 110.228320801 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0714285714 21.698381199 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 7.06452816374 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119832559589 0.272083759551 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511256945253 0.0996497079465 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483187697549 0.0662205650399 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0801115249679 0.162205337803 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262775800219 0.0443174109184 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.3589403974 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 63.6247240618 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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