The following report appeared in the newsletter of GoldenAge Independent and Assisted Living Facilities for Seniors."A novel therapy has come to our attention that promises to significantly decrease the incidence of dementia in our aging community. Accord

It has been rightly cited in the argument that people inhibit of GoldenAge apartment are regularly showing signs of dimentia, which supports the clause projected that they are moving into more sophisticated places of the same chain of societies. Although there are plenty of facts and reasoning which enables a person to think and evaluate the actual gist, but the some issues or projections made are totally depended on circumstances. So it get the actual gist we need to discuss on disparate rife which consist of loopholes while making the conclusion. Mentioned facts defy the actual reason why people are moving out of GoldenAge apartment, after dichotomy of the issue can lead to the creditable understanding.

As reference shared of Albert Einstein College of Medicince, are there any thoughts shared for which group of age dementia mostly affects ? Are there any specific reason for why it caused apart from lack of physical activiness ? Is lack of dancing is the only reason why people are moving out the apartment ? - there are plenty of rife on with reasonable loopholes which were not taken into consideration while coming up with on the fly solution. Was any time survey was conducted which had option to opt for people that what kind of activity they like the most, this would have been uncertain fact which was attenuated in the facts mentioned. There can be myriad no of reason why people of GoldenAge society are moving into the senior residence apartment apart from dance classes which they sponser, as moving out only for reason dance classes are not avaible raises apocryphal because this is the activity the person can easily arranged back in home. Argument fails to cite the what would have been releavant reason for moving of the people.

The facilities which are offered by the new apartment are not stated apart from dancing which also raise flag for conclusion and after taking the necessary steps that to get dance program running on GoldenAge apartment would it be really helpful to stop the movement of the peoples that is not supported by any evidence and thus lack success of the move. There would had been couple of systematic and precise way, to retrospect why the movement of people happening ? A survey would have helped admin team to know what would have been root cause of the move, was that really dance program or infamy vicinity and it various probablities of the cause. After studying and introspecting the data recieved a proper plan would had helped the GoldenAge admin team to form reactianary to work on.

As stated in argument, it can be true in some manner but not perfect evidence support the move of admin team. But if necessary homework would had been a help.

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Average: 1.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...k and evaluate the actual gist, but the some issues or projections made are totally ...
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Line 1, column 444, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'gets'?
Suggestion: gets
...tally depended on circumstances. So it get the actual gist we need to discuss on d...
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Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...he facts mentioned. There can be myriad no of reason why people of GoldenAge socie...
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Line 3, column 868, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...son dance classes are not avaible raises apocryphal because this is the activity ...
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Line 3, column 932, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'arrange'
Suggestion: arrange
...s is the activity the person can easily arranged back in home. Argument fails to cite th...
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Line 5, column 721, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...g the data recieved a proper plan would had helped the GoldenAge admin team to form...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, thus, while, apart from, in fact, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2212.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90465631929 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4999846106 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483370288248 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.7059879915 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.25 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1875 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0489570831206 0.218282227539 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.019113132625 0.0743258471296 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0192718032586 0.0701772020484 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.026254616174 0.128457276422 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196386717803 0.0628817314937 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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