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Directions: You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
Question: Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on points made in the reading passage.
Populations of the yellow cedar, a species of tree that is common in northwestern North America, have been steadily declining for more than a century now, since about 1880. Scientists have advanced several hypotheses explain this decline. One hypothesis is that the yellow cedar decline may be caused by insect parasites, specifically the cedar bark beetle. This beetle is known to attack cedar trees; the beetle larvae eat the wood. There have been recorded instances of sustained beetle attacks overwhelming and killing yellow cedars, so this insectis a good candidate for the cause of the tree’s decline. A second hypothesis attributes the decline to brown bears. Bears sometimes claw at the cedars in order to eat the tree bark, which has a high sugar content. In fact, the cedar bark can contain as much sugar as the wild berries that are a staple of the bears’ diet. Although the bears’ clawing is unlikely to destroy trees by itself, their aggressive feeding habits may critically weaken enough trees to be responsible for the decline. The third hypothesis states that gradual changes of climate may be to blame. Over the last hundred years, the patterns of seasonal as well as day-to-day temperatures have changed in northwestern North America. These changes have affected the root systems of the yellow cedar trees: the fine surface roots now start growing in the late winter rather than in the early spring. The change in the timing of root growth may have significant consequences. Growing roots are sensitive and are therefore likely to suffer damage from partial freezing on cold winter nights. This frozen root damage may be capable of undermining the health of the whole tree, eventually killing it.
word Count: 216
The passage and lecture are both talking about declination of cedar population in North America. The author claims several reason to explain causes of this declination. the lecturer casts doubt on claim made in article. He states , these reasons are inadequed .
First, the writer says, insect parasites attacked these trees and killing them. He mentions beetles feed on wood of cedar trees and cause tree declination. The lecturer refutes this notion. He states. cedar trees have a resistant to beetles. They release chemical substance than can kill these parasites. Furthermore parasites attacked dead trees'
Second, the author contents, bears have a big effect on cedar trees. They climb trees and feed on sugar, therefore they killed these trees from aggressive feeding habits. This point is challenged by professor. He suggests there is trees declination in many areas which do not have bears. Therefore bears are not real cause of decrease in cedar population.
Finally, the author points out , change in climate may cause declination in cedar trees. This is due to change in timing of root growth. The professor contradicts this argument. He says, if frozen winter cause decrease in cedar population. It has to be increase of these trees in warm season. But there is no evidence of elevation in trees population in warm climate.
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Writing Hide Time25:23
Directions: You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
Question: Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on points made in the reading passage.
Populations of the yellow cedar, a species of tree that is common in northwestern North America, have been steadily declining for more than a century now, since about 1880. Scientists have advanced several hypotheses explain this decline. One hypothesis is that the yellow cedar decline may be caused by insect parasites, specifically the cedar bark beetle. This beetle is known to attack cedar trees; the beetle larvae eat the wood. There have been recorded instances of sustained beetle attacks overwhelming and killing yellow cedars, so this insectis a good candidate for the cause of the tree’s decline. A second hypothesis attributes the decline to brown bears. Bears sometimes claw at the cedars in order to eat the tree bark, which has a high sugar content. In fact, the cedar bark can contain as much sugar as the wild berries that are a staple of the bears’ diet. Although the bears’ clawing is unlikely to destroy trees by itself, their aggressive feeding habits may critically weaken enough trees to be responsible for the decline. The third hypothesis states that gradual changes of climate may be to blame. Over the last hundred years, the patterns of seasonal as well as day-to-day temperatures have changed in northwestern North America. These changes have affected the root systems of the yellow cedar trees: the fine surface roots now start growing in the late winter rather than in the early spring. The change in the timing of root growth may have significant consequences. Growing roots are sensitive and are therefore likely to suffer damage from partial freezing on cold winter nights. This frozen root damage may be capable of undermining the health of the whole tree, eventually killing it.
word Count: 216
The passage and lecture are both talking about declination of cedar population in North America. The author claims several reason to explain causes of this declination. the lecturer casts doubt on claim made in article. He states , these reasons are inadequed .
First, the writer says, insect parasites attacked these trees and killing them. He mentions beetles feed on wood of cedar trees and cause tree declination. The lecturer refutes this notion. He states. cedar trees have a resistant to beetles. They release chemical substance than can kill these parasites. Furthermore parasites attacked dead trees'
Second, the author contents, bears have a big effect on cedar trees. They climb trees and feed on sugar, therefore they killed these trees from aggressive feeding habits. This point is challenged by professor. He suggests there is trees declination in many areas which do not have bears. Therefore bears are not real cause of decrease in cedar population.
Finally, the author points out , change in climate may cause declination in cedar trees. This is due to change in timing of root growth. The professor contradicts this argument. He says, if frozen winter cause decrease in cedar population. It has to be increase of these trees in warm season. But there is no evidence of elevation in trees population in warm climate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Typically,
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Suggestion: several reasons
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Suggestion: ,
...oubt on claim made in article. He states , these reasons are inadequed . First,...
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Suggestion: .
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Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ubstance than can kill these parasites. Furthermore parasites attacked dead trees Second,...
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Suggestion: there are trees
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Suggestion: ,
...ation. Finally, the author points out , change in climate may cause declination...
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Suggestion:
...in warm season. But there is no evidence of elevation in trees population in warm...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, well, as to, in fact, talking about, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 10.4613686534 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 22.412803532 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 30.3222958057 247% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2990.0 1373.03311258 218% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 584.0 270.72406181 216% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1198630137 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91590194646 4.04702891845 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57088868692 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 145.348785872 199% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494863013699 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 903.6 419.366225166 215% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 3.25607064018 491% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 39.0 13.0662251656 298% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7770309278 49.2860985944 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6666666667 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9743589744 21.698381199 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07692307692 7.06452816374 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.09492273731 195% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 4.19205298013 382% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 4.45695364238 359% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.27373068433 374% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206761040527 0.272083759551 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481895803092 0.0996497079465 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132128354588 0.0662205650399 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154237517679 0.162205337803 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.23107262435 0.0443174109184 521% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 53.8541721854 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.82 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 63.6247240618 211% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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