TOEFL Sample essay : integrated essay from TPO4

The professor says many scientists don't believe that the evidence introduced in the reading passage is enough to prove that the dinosaurs are endotherms, then she cast out the passages information one by one.

To begin with, according to the lecture the polar regions were warmer at the time dinosaurs live, and they might migrate or hibernate like modern reptiles in the cold seasons, so those animals could have lived in cold places without being endotherms.

Secondly, the reading argues dinosaurs legs were underneath their bodies, so they were runner and endotherms. The lecture refuted this assumption by the fact that being large was an advantage for dinosaurs and for moving that body appropriately their legs placed under thier bodies this doesn't necessarily relate to being a runner. appropriately

Finally, the professor claims there were also growth rings in the dinosaurs' bone which shows dinosaurs grow more slowly in the cold temperate. And while we know, endotherms grow rapidly even in cold weather this evidence prove dinosaurs were nor endotherms, on the contrary, the reading passage holds the idea of Haversian canals existence is enough information to show that dinosaurs were endotherms.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
The professor says many scientists dont believe that the evidence introduced in...
^^^^
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'passages'' or 'passage's'?
Suggestion: passages'; passage's
...s are endotherms, then she cast out the passages information one by one. To begin wit...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...eir legs placed under thier bodies this doesnt necessarily relate to being a runner. a...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Appropriately
...t necessarily relate to being a runner. appropriately Finally, the professor claims there ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, second, secondly, so, then, while, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1028.0 1373.03311258 75% => OK
No of words: 192.0 270.72406181 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35416666667 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64542319656 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 145.348785872 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619791666667 0.540411800872 115% => OK
syllable_count: 317.7 419.366225166 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 21.2450331126 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.1645366977 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.333333333 110.228320801 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 21.698381199 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.3333333333 7.06452816374 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 13.3589403974 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 53.8541721854 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.0289183223 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 63.6247240618 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.498013245 141% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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