TOEFL Sample essay : integrated essay from TPO8

The reading passage argues three reasons that Chevalier's memoir is not accurate and invented many events to make it glamorous while the professor admitted all memoirs are not exact in every detail, but Chevalier's memoir is reliable.

To begin with, according to the lecture, being wealthy is deferent from having money in cash which means when someone ran out of cash it takes a long time to sell the properties so, in a meanwhile people borrowed loans like what Chavalier did. This explanation dissolves passages issue that when he was rich, he didn't need to borrow money.

Secondly, the professor declares Chevalier take notes about his conversation with Voltaire, and he kept those for long so that he could write the memoir based on notes, this fact refutes readings argument which says it is impossible to remember exact phrases from many years earlier conversation.

Finally, reading passage proposes bribery was a better solution for Chevalier to escape from prison instead of any daring escape. On the contrary, the professor suggests, if bribery was possible stronger prisoners were in the prison who could escape, moreover, government documents represent repair of the prison ceiling after Chevalier scape this indicates his escape throw ceiling was true.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...assages issue that when he was rich, he didnt need to borrow money. Secondly, the ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1072.0 1373.03311258 78% => OK
No of words: 203.0 270.72406181 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28078817734 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52770328446 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.679802955665 0.540411800872 126% => OK
syllable_count: 330.3 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 21.2450331126 155% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.4079875888 49.2860985944 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.666666667 110.228320801 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.8333333333 21.698381199 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.5 7.06452816374 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0307614851547 0.272083759551 11% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0166638286978 0.0996497079465 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0173311105694 0.0662205650399 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0176366185194 0.162205337803 11% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0105051110549 0.0443174109184 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 13.3589403974 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 53.8541721854 71% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.0289183223 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.42419426049 114% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.498013245 145% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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