TOEFL T P O 08 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the lecture are both about the memoir written by Chevalier. The author of the reading provides 3 explanations to prove that the memoir is not accurate. The lecturer challenges the claims made by the author. She is of the opinion that the explanations provided in the reading is faulty and hence, states that memoir written by Chevalier is accurate.

To begin with, the author of the reading argues that Chevalier borrowed money from a Swiss merchant to spend on parties and gambling. In the article, it is also mentioned that if Chevalier was rich, then there would be no reason for him to borrow money. This specific argument is directly challenged by the lecturer. She feels that Chevalier had many assets which were converted into money, and hence, it took time to convert. Moreover, she states that a person borrowing money from another does not necessarily imply whether the person is rich or poor.

Secondly, the writer mentions about the skepticism surrounding the accuracy of the conversations between Chevalier and Voltaire. The article mentions that it is not possible for anyone to remember the exact conversations which took place many years ago. The lecturer, however, rebuts these claims by bringing into light, the notes taken by Chevalier each night about the conversations he had with Voltaire. Furthermore, the lecturer also mentions that various witnesses have claimed that Chevalier referred to his notes while writing about the conversations in the memoir.

Finally, the author posits that Chevalier's account of escaping from a prison in Venice is dubious. The article argues that Chevalier had powerful friends in Venice, and thus, used his connections to bribe his way out of the prison. In contrast, the lecturer states that other prisoners jailed in the same prison as Chevalier, had more powerful friends than Chevalier did, but, could not escape from the prison. The lecturer goes on to say that old Venician documents indicate that the ceiling of the prison cell in which Chevalier had stayed, needed some repairs implying that Chevalier had escaped by making a hole in the prison ceiling.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... prove that the memoir is not accurate. The lecturer challenges the claims made by ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, in contrast, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1373.03311258 131% => OK
No of words: 350.0 270.72406181 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12285714286 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61875340339 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517142857143 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 419.366225166 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7287334727 49.2860985944 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.470588235 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5882352941 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64705882353 7.06452816374 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00943778193596 0.272083759551 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00345286390984 0.0996497079465 3% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0138114556394 0.0662205650399 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0060689675439 0.162205337803 4% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0105117601355 0.0443174109184 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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