The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
cooperation and competition together help in preparing young people for leadership roles in various fields. hence, cooperation alone will not help in preparing youngsters for future leadership roles, and therefore, by instilling in them a sense competition along with cooperation will prepare them for the competitive world.
Let's first look at the importance of cooperation in a leader. A leader, who is responsible for managing a team or a group of people, has the responsibility of ensuring that everyone within his/her team is on the same page. hence, cooperation will play a major role in determining the success of the team and therefore, their leader. For example, consider a formula 1 team which is competing in a Grand Prix event. There are many people who are part of a formula 1 team, and everyone must perform their roles efficiently for the team to be successful at the race. this team includes mainly the driver, who has the highest responsibilty, a few technical staff, the team manager, who helps in coordinating all the activities, and the pit crew, who are responsible for changning tyres and other car parts during the race. If one of these members fail to perform any of the tasks correctly, it can cost the team an entire race and a lot of money. this example shows us the importance of cooperation among team members in the team, and the leader who is responsible for the team, should himself have a sense of cooperation to ensure that the team works effectively. therefore, it is necessary to instill a sense of cooperation in youngsters to prepare them for the future.
On the other hand, competition too plays a vital role in building the qualties of a person, who aspires to be a leader in the future. competition in any field, helps in improving the performance of an individual or a team. For example, let us consider world of sports. In sports, it is common to see people competing with extremity for winning the competition. competition helps in breaking the boundaries of previous achievements, and helps people to reach greater heights in the world of sports. Thus, without competition, sports would not be interesting or exciting. Healthy competition is the need of the hour, since negative competition can often result in bringing down the person morally and eventually, lead to depression. hence, the world of sports illustrates the necessity of competition for a person to grow and reach greater heights. therefore, by instilling a sense of competition in young people, it would go a long way to help them survive in the ever competitive world.
To summarize, the above examples show us the importance and necessity of both competition and cooperation in the development of young people for their future leadership roles in government, industry or other fields.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Cooperation
cooperation and competition together help in prepar...
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...for leadership roles in various fields. hence, cooperation alone will not help in pre...
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... the team to be successful at the race. this team includes mainly the driver, who ha...
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...team an entire race and a lot of money. this example shows us the importance of coop...
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...ensure that the team works effectively. therefore, it is necessary to instill a sense of ...
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...o aspires to be a leader in the future. competition in any field, helps in improving the pe...
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... extremity for winning the competition. competition helps in breaking the boundaries of pre...
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...rson to grow and reach greater heights. therefore, by instilling a sense of competition i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, look, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2354.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02991452991 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00520875766 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438034188034 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.0 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6834220216 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.095238095 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90476190476 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205726450821 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739410176467 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624702744006 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148286745491 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406722249282 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.