TOEFL T P O 08 Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the lecture are both about the memoir Chevalier de Seingalt. The author of the reading states that various critics doubt the accuracy of his memoir. The lecturer contradicts the claims made by the author. He is of the opinion that the memoir can be considered a reliable historical source.
To begin with, the author argues that while Chevalier was in Switzerland he used to waste outrageous amounts of money on gambling and partying. The article mentions that he borrowed money from a Swiss merchant, therefore, by no means can he be considered to have been rich. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. She claims that Chavalier had many tangible assets that he could not convert to money instantly. Additionally, she says that he borrowed money from the merchant while he was waiting for his money to be given to him from the people he had sold his property to.
Secondly, the writer suggests that the accuracy of his conversations with the writer Voltaire is also doubted by the critics. In the article it is said that this is due to the fact that he wrote his memoir many years after the actual conversations had taken place, so it was impossible for him to fully remember them. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by mentioning that he used to write down all of his discussions with the writer as soon as he returned home. He elaborated on this by bringing up the point that witnesses claim that he often consulted his notes and journals before writing.
Finally, the author posits that even though Chavalier himself claims to have escaped through the ceiling, critics maintain that since he had numerous connections, he simply bribed the jailers to free him. In contrast, the lecturer’s position is that this could not have happened as there were other prisoners with much more powerful friends than the ones of Chevalier, and yet they were not able to be released. She notes that there are also some government documents that state that after the Chevalier's escape, the ceiling in his jailroom had to be repaired, therefore it is almost certainly that he fled the way he describes it in his memoir.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 166, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...itics doubt the accuracy of his memoir. The lecturer contradicts the claims made by...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in contrast, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 22.412803532 286% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 30.3222958057 162% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1373.03311258 129% => OK
No of words: 368.0 270.72406181 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82336956522 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5889181798 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516304347826 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 419.366225166 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0682077912 49.2860985944 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.9375 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00828023539148 0.272083759551 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00337478184669 0.0996497079465 3% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0130704738893 0.0662205650399 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00547673723645 0.162205337803 3% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00948598715323 0.0443174109184 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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