TOEFL T P O 32 - Integrated Writing Task

The main topic of both the reading and the lecture is about the causes of the odd sounds in the North Atlantic and the Arctic Ocean. The reading passage claims that there are three theories for this phenomenon. The lecturer, on the other hand, not only categorically casts doubt on every single point raised by the author of the reading passage through citing three counter-arguments but also believes that none of the mentioned theories is enough convincing.

To begin with, the author of the reading passage establishes that the sounds of orca whales might be one of the sources for those eccentric sounds. Conversely, the lecturer rebuts this idea, stating that at the first glance, this cause that those sounds were produced by the orca whales seems plausible but they live near the surface of the ocean water and the submarines existed and moved deep in the ocean. Therefore, the Russian people lived in the submarine were not able to hear those sounds. Also, he mentions that those whales could be easily detected by submarines if the submarines moved near the surface of the ocean water.

Furthermore, unlike the reading passage which brings up this idea that giant squids could be a great explanation for those odd sounds, the lecturer supports a mutually exclusive view compared to that of the passage. The lecturer specifies that the odd sounds firstly detected in 1960 and suddenly disappeared after 1980; however, the squids are still living there and they did not move any other areas. Therefore, there is no good reason for the disappearance of hearing the odd sounds for two decades.

Eventually, the reading goes on to mention that those eccentric sounds may be related to another country's submarines that stealthily moved in that area. Notwithstanding, the lecturer points out that this idea does not hold up because the sounds were changing directions quickly; however, the submarines could not change their direction at that time. Also, in that time, the engine of the submarines had huge sounds, thus, if those sounds related to the submarines, the sounds of the engine of the submarines would have been detected.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 212, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...are three theories for this phenomenon. The lecturer, on the other hand, not only c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1373.03311258 130% => OK
No of words: 355.0 270.72406181 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04225352113 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57123699232 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492957746479 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 542.7 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.8810020538 49.2860985944 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.692307692 110.228320801 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3076923077 21.698381199 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06452816374 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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