TOEFL T P O 40 - Integrated Writing Task
The reading claims that although it would be possible to keep a human on Mars and the Moon, it would be impossible on Venus for a various reason. However, the professor believes that the reading's reasons are unconvincing and refuse them.
Firstly, the reading argues that due to atmospheric pressure at Venus' surface, a force of 100 Kilogram is pressing down on this surface which means that all space crafts would be crushed. Controversy, the professor reckons that if space crafts would be followed on the atmosphere of Venus such as a balloon, it could not be damaged by atmospheric pressure. Since 50 KM above the surface, the condition is similar to earth.
Secondly, the reading describes that there are not essential elements such as water on the surface of this planet, while in this place there are plenty of toxin gases. In contrast, the professor argues that the atmosphere of Venus is made up of CO2 and sulfur which can produce water based on these elements by the chemical process.
Finally, although the reading describes that this plant receives a little sunlight, the professor claims that not only the clouds are not very thick, but also by equipping the spacecraft by solar power electricity can be produced. When the sunlight is reflected by clouds, it can be absorbed by spacecraft.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 95, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'Kilogram' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilograms'.
Suggestion: Kilograms
...essure at Venus surface, a force of 100 Kilogram is pressing down on this surface which ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1089.0 1373.03311258 79% => OK
No of words: 221.0 270.72406181 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92760180995 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6261579611 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 145.348785872 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542986425339 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 332.1 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2390043956 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 110.228320801 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5555555556 21.698381199 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8888888889 7.06452816374 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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