TOEFL TPO 01 - Integrated Writing Task

In the reading section, the author contends that four-day work week would benefit the country as a whole, companies, and individuals who decided to take the option. However, in the listening part, the professor holds a totally different view.

In the first place, the writer makes the point that working four-day a week would increase company profits. That is because, employees make fewer severe mistakes and also hiring new workers would not result in additional payroll costs. In contrast, the lecturer rejects this notion by stating that shortened work week will force companies to spend more. Adding new workers mean putting more money on training and medical benefits. Besides, new employees need office space and computers which decrease the company profits.

What's more, on the contrary to the idea in the reading suggesting that the option of four-day workweek would be better for the whole economy because it would reduce the rate of unemployment.The professor argues that hiring new workers is costly and companies have other options. They might choose to ask their employees to work over time to make up difference. Worse, they might raise their expectations and believe that four-day employees can do same amount of the work they used to do in five days. If this happens, then no additional jobs will be created and current jobs will become unpleasant.

Finally, even though the writer of the passage indicates that shortened workweek would be better for individual employees for offering them more leisure time to spend with their family and improve their life quality, the lecturer suggests that working four-day a week presents risks for employees and will decrease the quality of their lives. That is because four-day workers are more likely to lose their job during an economic downturn. In addition, companies prefer to choose five-days employees in management positions to ensure a consistent supervision.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
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Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, however, if, so, then, in addition, in contrast, on the contrary, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 309.0 270.72406181 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26213592233 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53875605513 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 145.348785872 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559870550162 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.7756153228 49.2860985944 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.142857143 110.228320801 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06452816374 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.613308678689 0.272083759551 225% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185895724807 0.0996497079465 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1212899264 0.0662205650399 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.366821420349 0.162205337803 226% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0948052267158 0.0443174109184 214% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.3589403974 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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