TOEFL TPO 08 - Integrated Writing Task
The reading claims that Chevalier memoir has many distorted or invented events to become more exciting and glamorous and prove it with three points. On the other hand, the professor opposes each point by saying that the memoir is not possibly hundred percent accurate but it is reliable as a historical source.
First, the reading states that the money that Chevalier spent on gambling and partying is borrowed from a Swiss merchant. The reading concludes that as Chevalier was not rich. The professor refutes it by saying that he was not poor. On the contrary he was rich, however, this wealth means he had assets, not cash. To convert the properties to money by selling it, it consumes time. Therefore, he borrowed the money at the moment for the subsequent payback.
Second, the reading claims that the conversation Chevalier had with Voltaire is inaccurate because it was written after many years by Chevalier, and he may possibly forgot the conversation precisely. The professor opposes this statement by saying that the Chevalier wrote down each night after the conversations. Consequently, he kept them for many years, and subsequently, he implied them in his memoir. Also, Some witnesses attested that Chevalier used journals and notes to recall the events for writing the memoir.
Third, the reading claims that the Chevalier's escape from a notorious prison in Venice is fake. Actually, he had a number of politically well-connected friends in Venice who bribed the jailers to free him. The professor refutes that by saying there were many prisoners that have well-connected friends, however not one of them do this bribing exercise. According to Venetian documents, after Chevalier escaped, the ceiling of the cell, which Chevalier was kept there, was repaired. Thus, this illustrates that the escape event was not invented or distorted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
... saying that the memoir is not possibly hundred percent accurate but it is reliable as ...
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Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: MIGHT_PERHAPS[1]
Message: Use simply 'may', 'possibly'.
Suggestion: may; possibly
...n after many years by Chevalier, and he may possibly forgot the conversation precisely. The ...
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Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'may'.
Suggestion: may
...n after many years by Chevalier, and he may possibly forgot the conversation precisely. The ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, however, may, second, so, therefore, third, thus, well, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 299.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21739130435 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73971228828 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52508361204 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8346686337 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7647058824 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5882352941 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 7.06452816374 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460952922518 0.272083759551 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142455692366 0.0996497079465 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063168970796 0.0662205650399 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27871876208 0.162205337803 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530735886758 0.0443174109184 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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