TOEFL TPO 42 - Integrated Writing Task
Actually, both the passage and the lecture comment about birds' injuries when they collide to a glass window. Although the passage brings three strategies for resolving the mentioned problem, the lecturer puts those hypothesizes under question and according to the lecture, none of those methods are convincing.
First, as the passage illustrated, the number of birds' accident can be reduced by installing One-Way Glasses which is like a barrier that contributes birds to distinguish the glass. The lecturer; however, doesn't reinforce the claim by emphasizing the fact that albeit the One-Way Glasses look like the mirror and they are different from regular glasses, they are as deleterious as regular glasses because birds don't differentiate between mirror and glass.
Next, as the passage set forth, colorful design on the glasses such as stripes can extremely be counted as a helpful manner that preserves birds from such a danger; nonetheless, the lecturer refutes the thought by expressing that the whole between lines is as defective as a huge clean glass.
Finally, the article introduces an efficient solution in order to solve the indicated issue called Magnetic Field. It caused birds to alter their directions when they approach modern constructions. the idea is dismissed by the fact that bird's navigation ability is used only in long distances. for instance when birds are migrating from a cold climate to a warm, they utilize their special ability. It, unfortunately, can't help birds in short distances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...guish the glass. The lecturer; however, doesnt reinforce the claim by emphasizing the ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...erious as regular glasses because birds dont differentiate between mirror and glass....
^^^^
Line 13, column 199, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...hen they approach modern constructions. the idea is dismissed by the fact that bird...
^^^
Line 13, column 295, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...ability is used only in long distances. for instance when birds are migrating from ...
^^^
Line 13, column 419, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...eir special ability. It, unfortunately, cant help birds in short distances.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, however, if, look, nonetheless, so, for instance, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1292.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 240.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38333333333 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76826008332 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595833333333 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 419.366225166 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.0348640032 49.2860985944 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.2 110.228320801 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 7.06452816374 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.446830899294 0.272083759551 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163757460363 0.0996497079465 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888019357252 0.0662205650399 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241273494418 0.162205337803 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0858185618764 0.0443174109184 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.3589403974 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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