TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it c

This reading claims that the amount of sea otters is declining because of the environmental pollution, while the lecture contends that their predators are the most likely cause of their declining. This lecture actually provides three reasons to explain it.

First of all, investigation of the water sample in this reading indicates that the chemicals in the sample may cause sea otters to decrease, while according to this lecture, no one can find any real dead sea otters washed out to the beach, which is contrary to the results if the chemicals theory is true. However, their predators could kill other mammals and cause the death of many other mammals.

Secondly, the reading claims that the environmental pollution could also explain the large amount of death of the other small animals, but the predators could choose larger mammals to eat. In the contrary, the lecture reputes it and says if the sea otters are declining, their predators need to change their diets, which leads to the death of smaller mammals.

Thirdly, the reading supports the idea of pollution because there is a phenomenon of uneven concentration of pollutants. However, we find out in the lecture that ocres are not accessible to the location in shallow places so that the ocres cannot hunt the mammals in the shallow location where is exactly the same as the distribution of where no other dead animals exist.

In conclusion, the lecture insists the opinion that the reason why sea otters are declining is because of the large predators, which is different from the position of the reading that sea otters are killed by chemical pollution, and explain it from three above reasons.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'chemicals'' or 'chemical's'?
Suggestion: chemicals'; chemical's
...which is contrary to the results if the chemicals theory is true. However, their predator...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 93, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...the reason why sea otters are declining is because of the large predators, which is differ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1395.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 278.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01798561151 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55624833869 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460431654676 0.540411800872 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 424.8 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 21.2450331126 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.9065600496 49.2860985944 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.0 110.228320801 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8888888889 21.698381199 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1111111111 7.06452816374 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330886086078 0.272083759551 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139550748002 0.0996497079465 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699887812065 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191403476029 0.162205337803 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598006827799 0.0443174109184 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.3589403974 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 53.8541721854 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.498013245 133% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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