TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it c

The reading passage and the lecture are both discussing two opposite explanation of the sea otter’s depletion. The author of the passage believes that the reason for declination is the environmental pollution. The lecturer considers that the statements made in the reading passage aren’t the right explanation. She supposes that the main reason is the attacks of the predators, such as orcas, and she reinforces her opinion by providing several examples.

First of all, in the reading passage, it is denoted that the sea otters are dying because of the industrial chemical pollution. However, the lecturer asserts that no evidence of the dead bodies of the sea otters was found on the Alaskan coast. Consequently, due to that, the fact that sea otters were eaten by orcas and other predators seems more suitable explanation of sea otters’ depletion.

The subsequent lecturer argument is related to the statement made in the passage that other species populations are also decreasing at the same time and in the same place. She disputes this by claiming that decreasing of the sea mammals is caused by human intervenience. Thus, It isn’t the effect of the pollution on the entire ecosystem.

Finally, in the reading passage is identified that difference in the concentrations of pollutants created an uneven pattern of sea otters depletion. However, the lecturer claims that this pattern of declination is more connected with the predator’s distribution that they are more prefer to stay in deep rather than shallow places. Besides, she states that the number of the sea otters depends on the quantity of the orcas in the particular locations.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 216, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ination is the environmental pollution. The lecturer considers that the statements ...
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Line 8, column 132, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'otters'' or 'otter's'?
Suggestion: otters'; otter's
...utants created an uneven pattern of sea otters depletion. However, the lecturer claims...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, so, thus, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 5.01324503311 319% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 267.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28838951311 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00070830057 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50936329588 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.9 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0147893716 49.2860985944 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.615384615 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340707967223 0.272083759551 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120267334879 0.0996497079465 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635891288273 0.0662205650399 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206715088409 0.162205337803 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774930644398 0.0443174109184 175% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.8541721854 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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