TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it c | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it c

The professor discusses the rapid decline of small sea mammals among North America's west coast, and why it has been proved to be <a href="https://www.bestmytest.com/toefl-integrated-writing/1#modal-vocab-lesso… style="font-size: 11.5pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(17, 85, 204); font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; text-decoration-line: underline; text-decoration-skip-ink: none; vertical-align: baseline;">controversial</a>. The information he presents is in direct contrast with the details outlined in the reading passage. First, the lecturer denies the claim that the pollution is the main reason for the population decline. He argues that these small mammals are victim of larger predators. According to the professor, the larger predators kill the mammals and as a <a href="https://www.bestmytest.com/toefl-integrated-writing/1#modal-vocab-lesso… style="font-size: 11.5pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(17, 85, 204); font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; text-decoration-line: underline; text-decoration-skip-ink: none; vertical-align: baseline;">consequence</a> to the death mammals' bodies wash up on the Alaskan shore. In the contrary, the reading specify that the reason why these species have rapidly diminished  is the fact that many pollution sources are found among the coast which indirectly result in the mammal's death. Secondly, the speaker points out that orcas have changed their diets routines as a result of whales <a href="https://www.bestmytest.com/toefl-integrated-writing/1#modal-vocab-lesso… style="font-size: 11.5pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(17, 85, 204); font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; text-decoration-line: underline; text-decoration-skip-ink: none; vertical-align: baseline;">extinction</a>. In addition, the orcas started hunting other animals of prey such as small otters which are more frequently present among the Alaskan coast. On the other hand, the reading makes it clear that the <a href="https://www.bestmytest.com/toefl-integrated-writing/1#modal-vocab-lesso… style="font-size: 11.5pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(17, 85, 204); font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; text-decoration-line: underline; text-decoration-skip-ink: none; vertical-align: baseline;">extinct</a>ion of otters, as well as other small mammals indicates that pollution is the main factor of their rapid decline. Finally, the professor discusses the uneven pattern of this decline, and he <a href="https://www.bestmytest.com/toefl-integrated-writing/1#modal-vocab-lesso… style="font-size: 11.5pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(17, 85, 204); font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; text-decoration-line: underline; text-decoration-skip-ink: none; vertical-align: baseline;">mention</a>s that many large predators as orcas cannot reach the <a href="https://www.bestmytest.com/toefl-integrated-writing/1#modal-vocab-lesso… style="font-size: 11.5pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(17, 85, 204); font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; text-decoration-line: underline; text-decoration-skip-ink: none; vertical-align: baseline;">shallow</a> and rocky places where the population of other small otters is drastically more <a href="https://www.bestmytest.com/toefl-integrated-writing/1#modal-vocab-lesso… style="font-size: 11.5pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(17, 85, 204); font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; text-decoration-line: underline; text-decoration-skip-ink: none; vertical-align: baseline;">dense</a>. He explains that the places which are more <a href="https://www.bestmytest.com/toefl-integrated-writing/1#modal-vocab-lesso… style="font-size: 11.5pt; font-family: Arial; color: rgb(17, 85, 204); font-variant-numeric: normal; font-variant-east-asian: normal; text-decoration-line: underline; text-decoration-skip-ink: none; vertical-align: baseline;">accessible</a> for the predators are usual places where these small mammals decline. Nonetheless, according to the reading, the uneven pattern of concentration of pollutants is the major reason why the pollution is not present among all Alaskan shore.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1548, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... He argues that these small mammals are victim of larger predators. According to...
^^
Line 1, column 2458, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mammals'' or 'mammal's'?
Suggestion: mammals'; mammal's
...he coast which indirectly result in the mammals death.

^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, well, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 5.01324503311 559% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 6670.0 1373.03311258 486% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 621.0 270.72406181 229% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 10.7407407407 5.08290768461 211% => Less chars per word wanted.
Fourth root words length: 4.991980728 4.04702891845 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 14.0500723937 2.5805825403 544% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.286634460548 0.540411800872 53% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1635.3 419.366225166 390% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.6 1.55342163355 167% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 62.0 21.2450331126 292% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 556.40363047 49.2860985944 1129% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 667.0 110.228320801 605% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 62.1 21.698381199 286% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.4 7.06452816374 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0327174672102 0.272083759551 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577373707666 0.0996497079465 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725425976818 0.0662205650399 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0327174672102 0.162205337803 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 60.2 13.3589403974 451% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -76.05 53.8541721854 -141% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 26.7 5.55761589404 480% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 39.3 11.0289183223 356% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 45.9 12.2367328918 375% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 63.6247240618 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 41.5 10.7273730684 387% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.8 10.498013245 255% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 27.0 11.2008830022 241% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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