The reader claims three possible arguments related to the selling and buying of the fossils by the private collectors and provides reasons for supporting. On the other hand, the professor counters these specific points and presents clues to call into the information in the passage. He says the negative consequences of selling fossils to the private business are real but exaggerated because of the benefits of that businesses are out weighted the disadvantages
First, the reader discusses the impossibility of the public access to the fossils, conversely, the speaker counters this point by telling that the high hunting fossils make the public more access to the fossil, even though the private gaining by the wealthy persons. But the more significant number of fossils increase due to the corresponding increase the acquiring by the businessmen.
Second, the reader addresses the scientists lost the ability to discover essential fossils details due to this private businesses, while the professor casts doubt on this by explaining that each of the fossils should look at and evaluate first by the expert before selling to the private owner, so the scientist do not miss out this opportunity.
Third, the reader disputes the destruction of the most exquisite details in the fossils by the hunters, the professor, counter this by saying the damage of the fossil is groundless because of a lot of fossils are found due to the increase the business needs comparing to the damages that may happen to the fossils during excavating.
Essay evaluation report
because of the benefits of that businesses are out weighted the disadvantages
because the benefits of that businesses are out weighted the disadvantages
But the more significant number of fossils increase due to the corresponding increase the acquiring by the businessmen.
But a significant number of fossils increase because the corresponding increases the acquiring by the businessmen.
so the scientist do not miss out this opportunity.
so the scientists do not miss out this opportunity.
the professor, counter this by saying the damage of the fossil is groundless because of a lot of fossils are found
the professor counters this by saying that the damage of the fossil is groundless because a lot of fossils are found
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flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
you have serious grammar issues. You may read a good grammar book.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 12
No. of Words: 248 250
No. of Characters: 1264 1200
No. of Different Words: 129 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.968 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.097 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.715 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.518 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.511 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.757 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, if, look, may, second, so, third, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1291.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 248.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20564516129 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80184781826 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524193548387 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 419.366225166 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0662251656 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 21.2450331126 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.6805779072 49.2860985944 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 184.428571429 110.228320801 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4285714286 21.698381199 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7142857143 7.06452816374 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388938887307 0.272083759551 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175538358841 0.0996497079465 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806932908974 0.0662205650399 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240296377132 0.162205337803 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332735924275 0.0443174109184 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 13.3589403974 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 53.8541721854 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 11.0289183223 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.53 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.498013245 152% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.2008830022 187% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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