TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task

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TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task

Both the reading and the lecture discuss the effect of human population and agriculture growth on declinig the birds population. According to the reading, the author points out that the growth of human population an agricultre activity bring about declining in the number of birds in United Stateds. The author provides three competing reasons to support his/her point of view, namely increasing human population and settlements, increasing agricultural activity, increasing in the use of chemical pesticides. On the contrart, the professor rejects all three reasons by arguing that this claim in unconvincing and also proposes three alternative reasons.

Firstly, the reading passage asserts that increasing in human population and settlements result in disappring the birds' habitats. The lecture, however, refutes this point by saying that urban development provides better and large habitat for birds. As an example, people complain that there are a lot of birds such as pigeon are in th street. Moreover, the urban development does not cause uniform decline and cosequently many birds shrink and others grow.

Secondly, the article avers that as population increase the agricultural activities must increase to support the growin human population. this growth of agriculture bring about destruction of birds' habitats. The professor, by contrast, casts doubt on this idea by saying that it is true that agriculture cause the destruction but it is not happened by the way that the article mentions. Moreover, there are lessen less land that every year use as agricultural site that this rsult from produce the same crop. Furthemore, producing more agricultural product per area the need for using more areas decease.

Finally, the author claims that by increasing the agriculte the use of chemical pesticide increas which have a negetive effects on birds. The speaker, on the contrary, aaserts that it is true that the pesticide have been using for product but it would not increse to future and provide to change to defend her view. Firstly, new much poisiones pesticide is not harmful for birds and just have an effects on growing pest and secondly, the new generation crop would not attractive to pests so the using of pesticide will decrease. Therefore, pesticides will not harm birds in future.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
... and agriculture growth on declinig the birds population. According to the reading, t...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...to support the growin human population. this growth of agriculture bring about destr...
^^^^
Line 5, column 408, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'lessened'.
Suggestion: lessened
...e article mentions. Moreover, there are lessen less land that every year use as agricu...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 394, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an effect' or simply 'effects'?
Suggestion: an effect; effects
... is not harmful for birds and just have an effects on growing pest and secondly, the new g...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 572, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...erefore, pesticides will not harm birds in future.
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, such as, by the way, it is true, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1373.03311258 142% => OK
No of words: 365.0 270.72406181 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33698630137 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7659620512 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 145.348785872 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501369863014 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 599.4 419.366225166 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3759616429 49.2860985944 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.588235294 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23529411765 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452643451802 0.272083759551 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146271793254 0.0996497079465 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885052762888 0.0662205650399 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251127347399 0.162205337803 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329936065966 0.0443174109184 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.2367328918 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 63.6247240618 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.7273730684 144% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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