TPO-23 - Integrated Writing Task Populations of the yellow cedar, a species of tree that is common in northwestern North America, have been steadily declining for more than a century now, since about 1880. Scientists have advanced several hypotheses expla

The passage says that there are three hypotheses explain the decline of the yellow cedar. However, the speaker refutes that unfortunately the decline is the true, we still don not know what is killing the trees and all the reasons in the passages are adequate.

First, the passage mentions that the cedar bark beetle is the reason why yellow cedar tree decline. However, the speaker says that healthy yellow cedar are much more resisted to insect infect. For example, there are chemicals in their leaves which can poison insect. So, healthy yellow cedar are unlikely to suffer from insect damage. The explanation of the infested yellow cedar is that the trees are already damaged or sick and may soon die any way. So insect parasites is not the fundamental cause responsible for the decline of the yellow cedar, which is opposite to what the passage mentions.

Secondly, the passage posits that bears cause the decline of the yellow cedar. However, the professor argues that although some brown bears damage the yellow cedar, they are not the cause of the overall population decline of the yellow cedar. The populations of yellow cedar all over the northwestern North American is declining, containing the main land of American and off-coast island. There is no bear on the island. Since no matter there is with bear and without bear, the populations of the yellow cedar decline, bear is not responsible for the decline, which contradicts the reading passage.

Thirdly, the passage argues about freezing damage . Conversely, the professor rejects that the reading passage missing a fact that many populations of yellow cedar decline in many low elevasion area where is warm rather than in high elevation area where is cold. If freezing damage is responsible for the death of the yellow cedar, there should be more trees die in high elevation instead of the warm place in low elevation. So, although cold winter may make the growing roots sensitive, it is unlikely to kill them.

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Average: 7 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 50, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...the passage argues about freezing damage . Conversely, the professor rejects that ...
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Line 7, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...cedar decline in many low elevasion area where is warm rather than in high elevat...
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Line 7, column 455, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... elevation. So, although cold winter may make the growing roots sensitive, it is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 10.4613686534 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 332.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98192771084 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41828085973 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463855421687 0.540411800872 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.0 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0399173614 49.2860985944 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2941176471 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5294117647 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 7.06452816374 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 4.45695364238 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404101752304 0.272083759551 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147886430589 0.0996497079465 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652633465834 0.0662205650399 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246139534906 0.162205337803 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687828991024 0.0443174109184 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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