TPO-23 - Integrated Writing Task Populations of the yellow cedar, a species of tree that is common in northwestern North America, have been steadily declining for more than a century now, since about 1880. Scientists have advanced several hypotheses expla

There is a consent with fact that the populational of the yellow cedar is decreasing. However, the lecturer does not think that the hypotheses presented in the passage to explain this decline are adequate, and this essay will counter their arguments.
According to the author, the first possible reason for this event are the existence of insect parasites, to be more specific, the cedar bark beetle, which attack and kill these trees. On the other hand, the lecturer mentions the fact that the healthy yellow cedar trees are more resistant to infestations if compared to other trees, which makes insect damage unlikely, not forgetting to mention that parasites target are sick trees, which denies this hypothesis as the fundamental cause for yellow cedar decline.
The second hypothesis cited in the passage is related to the presence of brown bears. It is known that yellow cedar trees have a big amount of sugar on their barks and brown bears, intending feed themselves, tends to use their claws in order to seek for sugar, which destroying the trees. Nevertheless, the lecturer highlights the fact that the northwestern coast of U.S. area does not have bears, and the population of yellow cedar trees – with or without bears – are still declining, so bears could not be considered as a response.
As last, the third hypothesis stated by the author in the reading passage indicates the climate change as a possible reason for the yellow cedar decline. With the past of time, seasonal patterns have been currently changing, and the temperature between seasons made the growing roots more sensitive than before, and, consequently, less resistant and easily damageable by the cold. In opposition, the lecturer noticed that yellow cedar trees are present as in lower elevation areas, which temperature are usually hotter, as in higher elevation areas, which temperature are cold and, theoretically, more harmful for these trees. In instead, the lecturer highlights that more trees are dying in relatively lower elevations, which means that this hypothesis is also not what is killing them.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 514, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...amental cause for yellow cedar decline. The second hypothesis cited in the passa...
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Line 4, column 788, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hesis is also not what is killing them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, third, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1373.03311258 128% => OK
No of words: 341.0 270.72406181 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15249266862 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6364924828 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504398826979 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 419.366225166 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.6929928939 49.2860985944 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.727272727 110.228320801 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 21.698381199 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 7.06452816374 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453594549679 0.272083759551 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166681887403 0.0996497079465 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653395032578 0.0662205650399 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265802443883 0.162205337803 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699377619658 0.0443174109184 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.3589403974 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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