TPO 24- integrated writing task

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TPO 24- integrated writing task

The author states the discoveries of the material on the Tyrannosaurus rex bone, which scientists think that these are the remains of blood vessels, red blood cells and collagen matrix. As opposed to, the lecturer who counters-argues that viewpoint trying to prove that none of these three discoveries seems to be convincing.

First and foremost, the writer mentioned that the fossils of leg bone revealed many small branching channels inside, which probably correspond to hollows in the bones where blood vessels were once located. Therefore, this soft substance may very well represent the remains of actual blood vessels. On the contrary, the professor cannot disagree more, reasoning that these hollow might have been created by colonized bacteria that are decomposed after the animals death.

The second argument the author gives is that the microscopic examination of the inner bone revealed the presence of spheres that could be the remains of red blood cells. Apart from that, the test showed that the size of the sphere was about the same with the red blood cells. However, the lecturer cannot be more outraged, explaining that these spheres are found in other animals too. Consequently, if it appears that other organisms contain these mineral, it means that the origin comes from different part.

Lastly, on one hand, the passage points out that the scientists found that the leg bone contained collagen. Nevertheless, the lecturer declares that collagen cannot be seen in fossils that are 70 million year old because it does not last that long. Therefore, this is not an convincing point.

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Average: 8.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 456, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
... bacteria that are decomposed after the animals death. The second argument the autho...
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Line 8, column 273, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... last that long. Therefore, this is not an convincing point.
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, lastly, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, apart from, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 12.0772626932 182% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1357.0 1373.03311258 99% => OK
No of words: 259.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23938223938 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57889046847 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5446769294 49.2860985944 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.083333333 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.06452816374 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.518173044638 0.272083759551 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167474880422 0.0996497079465 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129766943519 0.0662205650399 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277636218872 0.162205337803 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634267374514 0.0443174109184 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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