TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The reading and the listening is both about the fossil of animal in which either the old fossil provides little opportunity of research or not. The author of the reading believes that the fossil of animal like dinosaur Asyrus leg provide the opportunity to research.The lecture cast doubts about this matter. He thinks that it is skeptical about the matter of dinosaur.

Firstly, The reading claims that there are holes in the leg of Asyrus fossil which indicates that there is a presence of blood vessel. Reading also believes that there is a presence of soft organic substances inside the channel. This point is challenged
in the lecture. He says that there is no blood cells, it is something else. He clarify the matter that bacteria are colonized which
makes the hole in the death fossil of dinosaur. The organic material of the bone is replaced by the bacteria. Furthermore he points out the hole is not really hole, it is just the residue of bacteria.

Secondly the reading states that there is a presence of spherical shape and also presence of Iron which is the main component of red blood cell. Alongside this author also says that the size of the Rbc is same as the fossil contains.
The lecture rebut this argument. He suggest that the primitive animal does not contain any RBC (red blood cell).
Furthermore he argues that the shape of the RBC we think is not correct, it is the shape of reddish marrow.

Thirdly the author of reading opinion is that there is a presence of collagen. Chemical constituent of the collagen that is found in the fossil. But the lecture go against that. He says that collagen does not last longer and it only survives 1000 years.
So, how can it possible to survive 7 million years. In addition he says that the collagen constituent that is found is come from
the people who are involved in the research and it is the skin of them accidentally dropped down to the study subject.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...ding and the listening is both about the fossil of animal in which either the old...
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...leg provide the opportunity to research.The lecture cast doubts about this matter. ...
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...leg provide the opportunity to research.The lecture cast doubts about this matter. ...
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...de the channel. This point is challenged in the lecture. He says that there is no...
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Suggestion: clarifies
...o blood cells, it is something else. He clarify the matter that bacteria are colonized ...
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...matter that bacteria are colonized which makes the hole in the death fossil of di...
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Suggestion: Furthermore,
...f the bone is replaced by the bacteria. Furthermore he points out the hole is not really ho...
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...t there is a presence of spherical shape and also presence of Iron which is the m...
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...me as the fossil contains. The lecture rebut this argument. He suggest that the prim...
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...s. The lecture rebut this argument. He suggest that the primitive animal does not cont...
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Suggestion: Furthermore,
...es not contain any RBC red blood cell. Furthermore he argues that the shape of the RBC we ...
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Suggestion: addition,
...possible to survive 7 million years. In addition he says that the collagen constituent t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 10.4613686534 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 12.0772626932 182% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 22.412803532 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 340.0 270.72406181 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69411764706 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43371645402 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441176470588 0.540411800872 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 494.1 419.366225166 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3869370186 49.2860985944 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.0 110.228320801 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1904761905 21.698381199 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 7.06452816374 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.09492273731 244% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 4.19205298013 286% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.27373068433 281% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25245895695 0.272083759551 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770090040153 0.0996497079465 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060306119737 0.0662205650399 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0973449725019 0.162205337803 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059483340393 0.0443174109184 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.3589403974 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 12.2367328918 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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