TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The reading passage and the lecturer are both discussing the evidences of the remained blood vessels, blood cells and collagen matrix in the T. rex’s leg bone. The author of the snippet believes that there are some strong evidences was found by researches which approve the existance of the remnants of this blood system components. However, the lecturer considers that the statements made in the reading passage are wrong, and he reinforces his opinion by providing three explantions.

First of all, there is indicated in the reading fragment that the branching channels was found inside the bone which could be a representation of the actual blood vessels. However, the speaker asserts that the remained channels could be traces of the bacterias colonies, which were living in the bone. Consequently, the organic substance inside the bone was produced by the bacterias.

The subseguent lecturer argument is related to the statement made in the excerpt that presence of the spheres is an evidence of the red blood cells. The lecturer disputes this by claiming that this spheres was found not only in the T. rex bone, but also in more simple organisms next to the place, where this bone was found. Therefore, the spheres have different origin, such as mineral traces.

Finally, there is denoted in the reading fragment that the particular test on the bone showed that bone contained collagen. But the lecturer doesn’t agree with this statement by stating that collagen could be determined only in the fossils 1000 years old, and he supposes that this collagen could accidently came from skin of the reasercher.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...lecturer disputes this by claiming that this spheres was found not only in the T. re...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, so, therefore, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1365.0 1373.03311258 99% => OK
No of words: 265.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15094339623 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6400696885 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51320754717 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 412.2 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2994457679 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 110.228320801 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 7.06452816374 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382942329608 0.272083759551 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139770695131 0.0996497079465 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690660741378 0.0662205650399 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227603135969 0.162205337803 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361915105451 0.0443174109184 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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