TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

Usually, animal fossils do not contain any sign about living tissues. Animals living tissues are replaced by minerals naturally. Also, reading passage claim that some scientists found a fossil of T Rex which might contain remains of the dinosaur. On the other hand, the professor has opposing ideas based on the following reasons.
First, reading passage says that there are many channels inside the leg bone which can be the remains of blood vessels. Also, the professor mentions that after a time that an animal dies, bacteria penetrate in bones and colonize there so these channels can be a result of the bacteria colony in bones.
Second, passage claim that some tests reveal the existence of some spheres in the fossil. These spheres had a dark red center and their size is similar to red blood cells so they can be the remains of red blood cells. Although, professor mention that these spheres were found in other animals fossil which does not have any red blood cells so it can have another source. They might be reddish minerals.
Third, the passage says that some tests show that leg bone of dinosaur contains collagen. collagen is a material which makes living tissues so it could be from a bone tissue source. Although, professor says that collagen will decompose after one hundred years so it can not be found in a fossil which is for million years ago. As a result, it would be from another resource. Maybe, it is from the skin of a researcher that excavated it and it can not be a good reason for the existence of the remains of living tissues in fossils.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
... that these spheres were found in other animals fossil which does not have any red bloo...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 90, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Collagen
...leg bone of dinosaur contains collagen. collagen is a material which makes living tissue...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 308, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...n not be found in a fossil which is for million years ago. As a result, it would be fro...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, may, second, so, third, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1299.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 276.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70652173913 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28439945858 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 145.348785872 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 401.4 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8980773889 49.2860985944 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6 110.228320801 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 7.06452816374 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.27373068433 304% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410060852563 0.272083759551 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139573093953 0.0996497079465 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817573443118 0.0662205650399 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241840163595 0.162205337803 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458918160964 0.0443174109184 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.3589403974 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.2367328918 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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