TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2,200 years old. Each clay jay contained a copper cylin

The lecturer challenges the idea presented in the reading passage that vessels were not used as electric batteries. She states that those reasons discussed in the passage are not convincing.
The lecturer does not agree with the first point in the text that there is no proof that any metal wires were located near the vessels. She points out that absence of wires and electricity conductors do not mean that they were not. She states that the vessels were discovered by local people and the other material were uninteresting for them. Also they cannot recognize those materials.
The lecturer refutes the claim in the reading that copper cylinders from Seleucia were not used for producing electricity. She believes that despite the fact that there is similarity between copper cylinders in jars and copper cylinders in the ruins of Seleucia, the copper cylinder may be adopted for another purpose.

The lecturer casts doubt the final claim in the reading that people did not use the electricity of vessels. She explains that there is evidence of invisible power of vessels. The small touch of those vessels can lead to mild shock. Also those vessels are used in modern medicine such as healing and relieving pain.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The lecturer challenges the idea present...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sed in the passage are not convincing. The lecturer does not agree with the fir...
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Line 2, column 347, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...r material were uninteresting for them. Also they cannot recognize those materials. ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...they cannot recognize those materials. The lecturer refutes the claim in the re...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... may be adopted for another purpose. The lecturer casts doubt the final claim...
^^^
Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...f those vessels can lead to mild shock. Also those vessels are used in modern medici...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, may, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1020.0 1373.03311258 74% => OK
No of words: 203.0 270.72406181 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02463054187 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43221082434 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 145.348785872 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527093596059 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 319.5 419.366225166 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2586685403 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0 110.228320801 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9166666667 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41666666667 7.06452816374 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38107495436 0.272083759551 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129845413081 0.0996497079465 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080246773994 0.0662205650399 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215279725295 0.162205337803 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622851088166 0.0443174109184 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 63.6247240618 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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