TPO-28 - Integrated Writing Task Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him

The article is discussing the issue that the explorer arrived the North Pole or not and provides three reasons; however, the professor in the lecture believes that the facts can not serve as evidences.

First of all, the article says that there were Peary’s records which contain the information about the North Pole. On the contrary, the professor argues that the the committee of National Geographic Society were not objective since they were Peary’s close friends and even contributed to the trip. Furthermore, they only checked the data in a few days which implied that they did not conduct a careful investigation. As the result, the records were not a persuasive evidence.

Second, the article suggests that the 37 traveling days were not incredibly short, since a British explorer made the same trek less than 37 days. Nevertheless, the professor points out that Tom used less than 37 days because of the helping of carrying foods by airplane which could reduce the weight. Moreover, the climate was more favorable when Tom traveled to North Pole.

Finally, the article provides that the angle of shadow in the the photo matched the positon of the Sun at that time. In contrast, the professor claims the angle of the shadow was not precise enough since the photos already faded and even became blurred. Thus, those shadow on the photos cannot be used to calculate the position of the Sun.

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Average: 8.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...the contrary, the professor argues that the the committee of National Geographic Societ...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...the contrary, the professor argues that the the committee of National Geographic Societ...
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Line 7, column 59, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...le provides that the angle of shadow in the the photo matched the positon of the Sun at...
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Line 7, column 59, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...le provides that the angle of shadow in the the photo matched the positon of the Sun at...
^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'so', 'thus', 'in contrast', 'first of all', 'on the contrary']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.249042145594 0.261695866417 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.137931034483 0.158904122519 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0498084291188 0.0723426182421 69% => OK
Adverbs: 0.088122605364 0.0435111971325 203% => Less adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0114942528736 0.0277247811725 41% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126436781609 0.128828473217 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0191570881226 0.0370669169778 52% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.48339428989 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0114942528736 0.0208969081088 55% => OK
Particles: 0.00383141762452 0.00154638098197 248% => OK
Determiners: 0.168582375479 0.128158765124 132% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0114942528736 0.0158828679856 72% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0153256704981 0.0114777025283 134% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1408.0 1645.83664459 86% => OK
No of words: 236.0 271.125827815 87% => OK
Chars per words: 5.96610169492 6.08160592843 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.04852973271 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334745762712 0.374372842146 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.279661016949 0.287516216867 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.169491525424 0.187439937562 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.10593220339 0.113142543107 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48339428989 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546610169492 0.539623497131 101% => OK
Word variations: 52.1088499264 53.8517498576 97% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0529801325 84% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4545454545 21.7502111507 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9677168333 49.3711431718 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 132.220823453 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4545454545 21.7502111507 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.18181818182 0.878197800319 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.39072847682 118% => OK
Readability: 49.4206471495 50.5018328374 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.66129032258 1.90840788429 87% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.705807495218 0.549887131256 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.183367074426 0.142949733639 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0922973834401 0.0787303798458 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.722378771874 0.631733273073 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.160657845058 0.139662658121 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.404012545404 0.266732575781 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105742385913 0.103435571967 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.505771580147 0.414875509568 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0445601623048 0.0530846634433 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.554010442559 0.40443939384 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377403361478 0.0528353158467 71% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.26048565121 164% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 3.49668874172 57% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.62251655629 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 3.1766004415 126% => OK
Total topic words: 6.0 10.2958057395 58% => OK

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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