TPO-28 - Integrated Writing Task Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him

The lecturer disputes some of the arguments presented in the reading about Peary expedition to the North Pole. She believes that the arguments are not convincing.

Firstly, the reading posits that the National Geographic Society organized a committee to investigate Peary’s records and equipment used on the trip. However, the lecturer refutes this statement by stating that the committee which was truly set up by the National Geographic Society did not carry out an objective completion on the investigation. Moreover, the committee was composed of Peary’s friends which creates some bias and the investigation only lasted for two days. According to Peary, he admitted that the committee did not ensure a proper surveillance on the expedition.

Secondly, the reading claims that the recent expedition by Avery supports the claim of Peary trip lasting for 37 days. Conversely, the lecturer mentioned that there are some significant differences in Avery’s trips as compared to Peary’s trip. For one thing, she points out Avery did not carry much items on his trip and that his food was dropped on his way by the airplane which is totally different from Peary’s trip. In addition, she stated Avery had clement weather conditions than Peary’s. Ideally, there is no way the differences on both trips can give same result.

Finally, the reading states that the photograph taken by Peary’s makes it possible to calculate the Surfs position in the Sun by measuring the shadows. On the contrary, the lecturer points out that the techniques used by the scientists vary and as a result, the exact position might not be determined. She reiterates that a primitive camera was used to take those photographs and they are faded. Plus, the shadows looked blurred and fainted and cannot be used to calculate the Surfs position in the Sun

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 23, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
The lecturer disputes some of the arguments presented in the reading abou...
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Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ing, she points out Avery did not carry much items on his trip and that his food was...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, in addition, as a result, for one thing, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1568.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 299.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24414715719 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91722779476 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52508361204 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7344233926 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.533333333 110.228320801 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6 7.06452816374 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315440919024 0.272083759551 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108307931321 0.0996497079465 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672643019793 0.0662205650399 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186310473134 0.162205337803 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00954116970817 0.0443174109184 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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