TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

Good friendship, in literary terms, is one of the most difficult possessions an individual may have. There are tons of considerations and commitments to be employed in ensuring a sustainable friendship. While some group of people may hold the view that making new friends is more important than maintaining our small old folks, I, on the other hand, strongly believe that keeping old friends are more invaluable due to the various reasons which I will elaborate here below.

The first obvious point is that old friendships builds trust and reliability. With the passage of time, people get along to know themselves and interact to discover their behaviors, interests and principles. This gains trust and confidence among these group of people. My personal experience will shed more light this idea. Over the four years of my college, I had a small of group of friends that we studied together, attended school social activities and exchanged various things in common. We grew to know, appreciate,encourage and love each other. This relationship transformed to a genuine and strong relationship that holds up to this very moment. Accordingly, this invariably built trust and reliability because of the intimate relationship we developed. In contrary, having a huge of army of friends leaves us with no genuine friend as we do not concentrate to build a long lasting memorable friendship.

In addition, Old friends are more like a family. Certainly, old friends can be our advocates in times of need. Based on the long term relationship, they carry our burdens just like theirs. I remember vividly when my father was at the point of death in the hospital which required a huge some of money. I was despondent and thought all through on how to raise such significant amount of money. Whereas, I had a new friend who was highly influential, I knew it was improbable to approach and to request for such considerable amount of cash. This is as a result of no strong bond between us. Finally, I resorted to to my old time folk who delivered me from the great troubles.

To wrap up, it's irrefutable to argue that maintaining and preserving old friends is not more important than making new friends as it builds trust,genuine love and long lasting wholesome relationships.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , encourage
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Suggestion: , genuine
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, finally, first, if, may, so, whereas, while, in addition, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99736147757 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0217130203 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572559366755 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2361093328 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1904761905 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0476190476 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194697932695 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482603184303 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055325606608 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130464159154 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410938453196 0.0645574589148 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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