TPO-29 - Integrated Writing Task Large numbers of dinosaur fossils have been discovered in deposits on Alaska's North Slope, a region that today experiences an extremely cold,arctic climate. One hundred million years ago, when those dinosaurs were alive,

The reading and the author are both about the edmontosaur which migrated to the better region for living in arctic climate. The author of the reading believes that many evidence support this statement. The lecturer casts doubt the claim made in the reading. She thinks that none of these hypothesis are convincing.

First of all, the author points out that the diet of edmontosaur endorse their migration. It is mentioned that they fed plants and there were no plants germinate on that time. This point is challenged by the lecturer. She says that they did not migrate for food. Furthermore, she argues that there had been a sunshine for 24 hours in day and also it had been a warm place. So plants and vegetation could grow on the arctic region.

Secondly, the author contends that this dinosaur lived in herd. The article notes that moving in herds create a situation which animals coordinate their migration. The lecturer rebuts this argument. She believes that they live in herd for another reasons. She elaborates on this by mentioning that living in herd provide a great opportunity by which they gain extra protection and is it useful for them.

Finally, the author states that they had an ability with which they could migrate long distances. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that juveniles were not capable of living alone. She puts forth the idea that their child could not survive. So this dinosaur did not migrate.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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The reading and the author are both abou...
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Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much evidence', 'a good deal of evidence'.
Suggestion: much evidence; a good deal of evidence
...The author of the reading believes that many evidence support this statement. The lecturer ca...
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...t many evidence support this statement. The lecturer casts doubt the claim made in ...
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Message: Did you mean 'this hypothesis' or 'these hypotheses', 'these hypothesises'?
Suggestion: this hypothesis; these hypotheses; these hypothesises
...in the reading. She thinks that none of these hypothesis are convincing. First of all, the...
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... of these hypothesis are convincing. First of all, the author points out that...
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...ion could grow on the arctic region. Secondly, the author contends that this ...
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...tection and is it useful for them. Finally, the author states that they had...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, second, secondly, so, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 22.412803532 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1200.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 245.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89795918367 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39283951954 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542857142857 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 358.2 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 21.2450331126 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.4113078546 49.2860985944 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.1578947368 110.228320801 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.8947368421 21.698381199 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.89473684211 7.06452816374 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247088932338 0.272083759551 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731228538231 0.0996497079465 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511066818068 0.0662205650399 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152939837327 0.162205337803 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014782775348 0.0443174109184 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 13.3589403974 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.0289183223 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.25 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.498013245 65% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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