tpo 3

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tpo 3

The lecture was mainly about if the portrait of an elderly woman in a white bonnet <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-DD631E3405F31FD6A0ED9AB90C9C54E2" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="" data-pwa-dictionary-word="is really attributed" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">is really attributed</pwa> to <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-84F5D27072DA281E2CCF758C3199F847" data-pwa-rule-id="SIMPLE_SPELLING" data-pwa-category="spelling" data-pwa-hint="Unknown word: rembrandt" data-pwa-suggestions="Rembrandt" data-pwa-dictionary-word="rembrandt" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">rembrandt</pwa> or not. The professor claims that <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-8256D0C28BDBEC71715C0B7657DD1796" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="we attribute it~I attribute it~they attribute it" data-pwa-dictionary-word="it is attributed" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">it&nbsp;</pwa><pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-8256D0C28BDBEC71715C0B7657DD1796" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="we attribute it~I attribute it~they attribute it" data-pwa-dictionary-word="it is attributed" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">is attributed</pwa> to him; however, the reading passage doesn't.
The professor's lecture casts the doubt on the reading passage by using <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-5DBE16A440605356F1AC3C22F6B7311A" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_1365" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: several" data-pwa-suggestions="several" data-pwa-dictionary-word="a number of" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">a number of</pwa> points <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-8D2D04715C510CF6ED983B71EB7C4401" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_1603" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-dictionary-word="that are " class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">that are&nbsp;</pwa>contrary to that the portrait is his own.

The first point that the professor uses to cast doubt on the reading is the fur collar, he argues that it doesn't exist in the original one and <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-748CA68085A89D7C71F884133FFC692F" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="" data-pwa-dictionary-word="was added" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">was added</pwa> to increase its value. Conversely, the reading contends that there is an inconsistency in a woman's clothes.

The second point that the professor uses to cast doubt on the reading is light and shadow. The professor contends that a woman cloth reflects illumination on her face that's why his face is not in partial shadow. however, according to the reading, illumination of her face <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-0D51C49F5DF1C64A42FFD1D88647558D" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="" data-pwa-dictionary-word="is deemed" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">is deemed</pwa> as an inaccuracy as the dark fur collar may absorb light rather than reflect it.

Finally, the professor assures that the portrait belongs to <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-08D427E75C1AD92C23CDA7C18F979D40" data-pwa-rule-id="SIMPLE_SPELLING" data-pwa-category="spelling" data-pwa-hint="Unknown word: rembrandt" data-pwa-suggestions="Rembrandt" data-pwa-dictionary-word="rembrandt" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">rembrandt</pwa> by analyzing its panel. he contends that wood panel of the original portrait is of the same <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-7F725B71B0329C7E04F44C30FB0BD717" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_1942" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-dictionary-word="type of " class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">type of&nbsp;</pwa>wood panel of his. in contrast to the reading which stated that the portrait painted on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together which is distinct from his previous work.

to sum up, the points made by the lecture contracts the reading. fur collar, light and shadow, and wooden panel <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-7853143AB629098C64F08C3DEAC97BB0" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_2033" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: show" data-pwa-suggestions="show" data-pwa-dictionary-word="demonstrate" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">demonstrate</pwa> that the portrait isn't his own is in doubt.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...os;>demonstrate that the portrait isnt his own is in doubt.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, in contrast, in contrast to, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 10.4613686534 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 22.412803532 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 5174.0 1373.03311258 377% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 470.0 270.72406181 174% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 11.0085106383 5.08290768461 217% => Less chars per word wanted.
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.04702891845 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 13.3786557304 2.5805825403 518% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 197.0 145.348785872 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.41914893617 0.540411800872 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1382.4 419.366225166 330% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.9 1.55342163355 187% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 192.892857102 49.2860985944 391% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 287.444444444 110.228320801 261% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 26.1111111111 21.698381199 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.09492273731 147% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 43.5 13.3589403974 326% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -64.89 53.8541721854 -120% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 5.55761589404 308% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.8 11.0289183223 261% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 46.87 12.2367328918 383% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 63.6247240618 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 10.7273730684 196% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 29.0 11.2008830022 259% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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