TPO 31 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading and lecture both discuss the possible explanation of the fine lines of a Sinosauropteryx dinosaur. While the reading provides three claims to support the idea that these fine lines were not related to the feathers, the professor refutes saying, none of these claims are convincing.

Firstly, the reading avers that these lines did not have any functional structures, but these were a just a skin decomposition into fibers. However, the professor argues this notion saying that the lines on fossil unlike decomposition. This is because there was not a such decomposition in fossil of any other animals. In addition, other animals were well preserved and the researchers could not find any lines. So, these lines were functional structures.

Secondly, the article mentions that the scientists could not identify the anatomy of these lines and these might be just a remains of frills. On the other hand, the professor rejects this idea by pointing out that there is different between the composition of feathers and frills. In fact, the frills decomposition contains protein, but the feathers decomposition contains keratin not protein. In addition, the chemical composition of these lines contain keratin. So, these lines were feathers not frills.

Lastly, the reading states that the location of lines along the backbone confirms that there is no function of these lines to help the animals to fly or to control the body temperature. Nevertheless, the professor contradicts this idea by explaining that there is another functions of feathers. For instance, the pink heck has feathers on the tail. These feathers are colorful with a bright orange color. So, this bird uses these attractive feathers to attract the mates. So, this function called display function. Consequently, these feathers lines had a display function.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a (remains)' or simply 'remains'?
Suggestion: a (remains); remains
... of these lines and these might be just a remains of frills. On the other hand, the profe...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'frills'' or 'frill's'?
Suggestion: frills'; frill's
...on of feathers and frills. In fact, the frills decomposition contains protein, but the...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'feathers'' or 'feather's'?
Suggestion: feathers'; feather's
...decomposition contains protein, but the feathers decomposition contains keratin not prot...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 256, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are another functions'?
Suggestion: there are another functions
...ontradicts this idea by explaining that there is another functions of feathers. For instance, the pink hec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in addition, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 5.01324503311 319% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 291.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32989690722 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82341253474 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487972508591 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 471.6 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.1934177423 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6315789474 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3157894737 21.698381199 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.31578947368 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.27373068433 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297249699707 0.272083759551 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10837032717 0.0996497079465 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058537093523 0.0662205650399 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193744878717 0.162205337803 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273081344682 0.0443174109184 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.04 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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