TPO-32 - Integrated Writing Task Starting in the 1960s and continuing until the 1980s, sailors in Russian submarines patrolling the North Alantic and Arctic Ocean would occasionally hear strange sounds. These underwater noises reminded the submarine crews

In this set of materials, the author of the reading passage claims that there are three hypotheses of the strange sounds, called "quackers", detected by Russian submarines sailors from 1960s to 1980s. However, the professor thinks that the author's theories contain some defects.

First of all, the author states that the bizarre noise may be contributed to the male and female ocra whales. The sound of the ocra whale and the sound of the submarines had detected are identical. On the contrary, the professor disagrees. She explains that, in general, the whale inhabit near the surface ocean, while the submarines detected the sound in depth of an ocean. Therefore, it is highly unlikely the quackers sound is related to the whales.

In addition, the author discusses that according to the habitation of the giant squids is in the deep ocean, it is convincing that the noise was made by squids. However, the professor disputes the author's idea by saying that the sound was found in the 1960s at first and vanish in 1980, for twenty decades only, yet, the giant squids still survive in nowadays. If the squids still alive nowadays, the sound wouldn't disappear.

Finally, the author raises the point that the Russian sailors may be picked up the sounds from other country's submarines. On the other hand, the professor asserts that the sounds the sailors found changed direction rapidly. In fact, the submarines can't change the direction that fast. Furthermore, the submarine's engine sound wouldn't be so silent.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ds. However, the professor disputes the authors idea by saying that the sound was found...
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Line 5, column 349, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...ly, yet, the giant squids still survive in nowadays. If the squids still alive nowadays, th...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 408, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... squids still alive nowadays, the sound wouldnt disappear. Finally, the author raise...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 249, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ection rapidly. In fact, the submarines cant change the direction that fast. Further...
^^^^
Line 7, column 303, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'submarines'' or 'submarine's'?
Suggestion: submarines'; submarine's
...e direction that fast. Furthermore, the submarines engine sound wouldnt be so silent.
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 327, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...urthermore, the submarines engine sound wouldnt be so silent.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, in addition, in fact, in general, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1278.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 250.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.112 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65704798602 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 370.8 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.3451353465 49.2860985944 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2857142857 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6428571429 7.06452816374 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315445241954 0.272083759551 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110295050729 0.0996497079465 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696313934741 0.0662205650399 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184388517994 0.162205337803 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509080051126 0.0443174109184 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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