TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

The passage explains the uses of carved stone balls whereas the lecture defies the uses stating them as not convincing.

Firstly, the passage claims that the stone balls were used as the weapons for hunting and fighting. However, the lecture disagrees with it explaining that the balls were generally well preserved showing no signs of use as other common neolithic weapons did in past. There were visibly no marks and were completely intact.

Secondly, the passage suggests that the carved stone balls were uniform in size so they were used as standard weights in primitive weight system. The lecture, in contrast, contends the fact that the stone balls were made up of different material such as quartz, sand etc resulting different weight. Thus, they could not be used as the standard weights.

Thirdly, the passage affirms the carved stone balls for the social purpose represented as the marker of social status of their owners. The lecture argues that the balls were unlikely the social marker because some balls were carved intricately and some were carved in simple way. In the same way, when an individual is dead, his valuable possessions were buried along with the body. However, it seemed to be absent in tombs.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...e as other common neolithic weapons did in past. There were visibly no marks and were c...
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Line 5, column 65, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: uniform
...ggests that the carved stone balls were uniform in size so they were used as standard weights i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, whereas, in contrast, such as, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1032.0 1373.03311258 75% => OK
No of words: 204.0 270.72406181 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05882352941 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30719417134 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 145.348785872 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544117647059 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 311.4 419.366225166 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6117434156 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8181818182 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3636363636 7.06452816374 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452789879368 0.272083759551 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.183647462506 0.0996497079465 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118992147258 0.0662205650399 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287611618279 0.162205337803 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603374961904 0.0443174109184 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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