TPO-34 - Integrated Writing Task A huge marine mammal known as Steller’s sea cow once lived in the waters around Bering Island off the coast of Siberia. It was described in 1741 by Georg W. Steller, a naturalist who was among the first Europeans to see

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TPO-34 - Integrated Writing Task A huge marine mammal known as Steller’s sea cow once lived in the waters around Bering Island off the coast of Siberia. It was described in 1741 by Georg W. Steller, a naturalist who was among the first Europeans to see

The reading passage states that there are a number of theories why Steller's sea cows, which were the animals that lived in the waters around Bering island of Siberia, have become extinct. However, the professor explains that we do not know what the causes of their extinction exactly are and refutes each one of the author's theories.

First, that the sea cows may have been overhunted by a native Siberian group due to the supplying food resources, as the reading claims, is rejected by the professor. He contends that the sea cows were massive in their weight. Some of them were extremely enormous. At that period, the population of the Siberian people was not so large. It may be true that these people hunted these animals for their food supply, but the amount of this hunting was not excessive at that point of time.

Second, the reading article argues that the sea cows get extinct because of some ecological changes. In contrast, the professor posits that this claim is not likely to be true because if the loss of Kelp, which was the sea cows' main source of food, was a result of the ecological changes, then other plants would have also been affected by this change. However, nothing is reported to confirm this change at that time.

Third, the reading passage makes a point that the leading cause of the sea cows' extinction was European fur traders, who hunted these animals. On the contrary, the lecturer casts doubts on this point by saying that it might be because of the traders' hunting, but it should be noted that these animals' decrease in population had been started from a long time -hundred years- ago, before the time that traders arrived in that area. In fact, sea cows' population was already declining, prior to the trader's arrival. So, in this regard, the major factor of these animals' extinction would be whatever brought up the change in their population, not the traders' arrival.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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The reading passage states that there ar...
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...es each one of the authors theories. First, that the sea cows may have been o...
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...not excessive at that point of time. Second, the reading article argues that ...
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...to confirm this change at that time. Third, the reading passage makes a point...
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Line 7, column 501, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'traders'' or 'trader's'?
Suggestion: traders'; trader's
...ion was already declining, prior to the traders arrival. So, in this regard, the major ...
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Line 7, column 564, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
... this regard, the major factor of these animals extinction would be whatever brought up...
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Line 7, column 652, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'traders'' or 'trader's'?
Suggestion: traders'; trader's
...the change in their population, not the traders arrival.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, third, in contrast, in fact, as a result, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 10.4613686534 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 331.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78247734139 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29848418424 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 145.348785872 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513595166163 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.1944820205 49.2860985944 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.071428571 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6428571429 21.698381199 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.493659722603 0.272083759551 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16688340439 0.0996497079465 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104199004312 0.0662205650399 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29141236 0.162205337803 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365048134763 0.0443174109184 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 53.8541721854 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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