TPO 36 Integrated WritingHail—pieces of ice that form and fall from clouds instead of snow or rain—has always been a problem for farmers in some areas of the United States. Hail pellets can fall with great force and destroy crops in the field. Over th

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TPO 36 Integrated Writing
Hail—pieces of ice that form and fall from clouds instead of snow or rain—has always been a problem for farmers in some areas of the United States. Hail pellets can fall with great force and destroy crops in the field. Over the last few decades, a method of reducing hail, called "cloud seeding," has been tried. In cloud seeding, the chemical silver iodide is sprayed on storm clouds from an airplane This makes the clouds produce harmless rain or snow instead of hail. Several pieces of evidence suggest that cloud seeding has been effective in protecting crops from hail.

Actually, both the passage and the lecture discuss about cloud seeding, a method that is used to decrease hail in order to decline damages in farms. The article brings three evidences in order to prove the mentioned method; nonetheless, the professor puts those factors under question. According to the professor, none of these reasons are convincing.

First, the passage claims that the cloud seeding is an effective method by expressing the examination that has been done in laboratory by researchers. They believe hail will be altered to snow by adding silver iodide to cloud; however, the lecturer doesn't reinforce tis experiment by emphasizing the fact that real life is extremely different; beside, this enormous change in environment might be cause famine.

Next, As the passage mentioned evidence in Asia can acknowledge the advantages of elite way; nevertheless, as the professor indicated the climate condition of urban area is completely different in comparison with clear weather of rural farm; hence, this method might be not feasible in such condition.

Finally, local study is counted as a proof that is illustrated by the passage. If studies show a considerable reduce in hail harm, it is a wealthy method that people can take its advantages. The lecturer rejects that by adding the idea that reduction might be happened because of natural variation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 250, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... iodide to cloud; however, the lecturer doesnt reinforce tis experiment by emphasizing...
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Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: BE_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'because'?
Suggestion: because
...is enormous change in environment might be cause famine. Next, As the passage mention...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1157.0 1373.03311258 84% => OK
No of words: 219.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28310502283 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82081667867 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648401826484 0.540411800872 120% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.0246050175 49.2860985944 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.555555556 110.228320801 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0724298479919 0.272083759551 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0258156498321 0.0996497079465 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0231290358101 0.0662205650399 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0415729064614 0.162205337803 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146976241722 0.0443174109184 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.3589403974 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 53.8541721854 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.02 8.42419426049 119% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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