TPO 37 Integrated writing

The reading and lecture both discuss the turtle excluder devices' drawbacks. While the reading provides three limitations of TEDS, the professor, refutes, saying none of these claims are convincing.

Firstly, the reading turtles are very rare to be caught be shrimpers and these TEDs will allow the shrimp to escape. On the other hand, the professor argues this notion by saying that even though catching the turtle is very rare, shrimpers can catch like thousand of turtle every year. In addition, the turtle's population is very small. So, catch thousand of turtle yearly is a big problem. As you can see, we can compare the effect on turtle as a whole population with the shrimp as a whole population.

In addition, the article mentions that we can leave the net under water for a short time. So, all turtles can get air. However, the professor contradicts this idea by pointing out that there is a big problem to manage the time that these will boats will stay in. Moreover, we can not government these boats.

Lastly, the reading states that the large turtles cannot escape. This is because the TEDs holes are not big enough. Nevertheless, the professor refutes this point by explaining that this is true that these holes are small, but we can create bigger ones. Consequently, the large TEDs will allow the big turtle to go through. As a result, this will not be a problem anymore to protect the big turtles.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'turtles'' or 'turtle's'?
Suggestion: turtles'; turtle's
... of turtle every year. In addition, the turtles population is very small. So, catch tho...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...les population is very small. So, catch thousand of turtle yearly is a big problem. As y...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'boat'
Suggestion: boat
...blem to manage the time that these will boats will stay in. Moreover, we can not gove...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, lastly, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, in addition, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1177.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 245.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80408163265 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42714758467 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518367346939 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 419.366225166 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6766225251 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.5625 110.228320801 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3125 21.698381199 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.3589403974 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 53.8541721854 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.0289183223 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 12.2367328918 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.42419426049 86% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 63.6247240618 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.2008830022 62% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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