TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading and lecture both discuss the possibility of life on Venus' surface. While the reading provides three explanations that confirm that the life on Venus is impossible, the professor refutes, saying none of these claims are convincing.

Firstly, the reading avers that the pressure on Venus's surface is very high that could crush anything over there. On the other hand, the professor argues this notion by saying that we can make a station floating at the atmosphere like a ballon. Moreover, at fifty thousands colimeter height, the pressure will be low. Furthermore, the pressure will be equal to the pressure at Earth's surface. So, the tools will not be crushed by any pressure.

Secondly, the article states that there is no water or oxygen at Venous' surface. Also, the idea on importing the water to the Venous is not practical. However, the professor rejects this idea by pointing out that there is oxygen carbon dioxide and sulforic acid that we can use these combination to produce water. As a result, there is no need to import them to the Venous.

Lastly, th e reading mentions that there is a thick could that can prevent the sunlight to go through. So, it will be so hard to generate electricity to power the tools. Nevertheless, the professor contradicts this idea by explaining that that clouds at high level of atmosphere would not be thick. So, these cloud will allow the sunlight to go through . As a result, the sunlight will be reflected and they can get power to generate the station.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...discuss the possibility of life on Venus surface. While the reading provides thre...
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Line 5, column 279, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this combination' or 'these combinations'?
Suggestion: this combination; these combinations
...oxide and sulforic acid that we can use these combination to produce water. As a result, there is...
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Line 7, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...import them to the Venous. Lastly, th e reading mentions that there is a thick...
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Line 7, column 240, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...contradicts this idea by explaining that that clouds at high level of atmosphere ...
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Line 7, column 355, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ud will allow the sunlight to go through . As a result, the sunlight will be refle...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1259.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 260.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84230769231 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59021967671 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523076923077 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1318387471 49.2860985944 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6875 110.228320801 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 21.698381199 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6875 7.06452816374 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330086070339 0.272083759551 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104867532529 0.0996497079465 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455524399407 0.0662205650399 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172233535523 0.162205337803 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400928072125 0.0443174109184 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.3589403974 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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