TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

In the reading passage, the author proposes the reasons why maintaining a human presence on Venus is not feasible. Whereas, the lecturer formulates a solution to the problems by constructing a floating station at the height of 50 kilometers from Venus' surface, all the problems mentioned could be resolved.

According to the reading, the atmospheric pressure at Venus' surface is 90 times larger than that on Earth. Everything would be crushed on Venus when landing. The lecturer refutes this argument and suggests that at the height of 50 kilometers the atmospheric pressure would be the equivalent of that on Earth, which is much lower and bearable.

Second, the author states that the lack of adequate oxygen and water vapor makes Venus inhospitable and that transporting these elements from Earth would be too impractical. The lecturer counters this view, providing another solution. If astronauts utilize carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid in Venus' atmosphere, they could generate oxygen and water by these compounds. Therefore, they don't have to import oxygen and water from Earth anymore.

Third, the author claims that thick clouds deter sunlight from reaching the surface as most sunlight is reflected back into space by thick clouds. Without enough solar energy, machines won't be able to operate. The lecturer contends that the floating station is in a favorable position that it could receive more sunlight than on the planet's surface. Both the light traveling above and reflected below could be absorbed by the station. Accordingly, there would be sufficient electricity to power the machines and equipment.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, if, second, so, therefore, third, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 256.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.359375 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70722007368 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56640625 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8684899179 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 7.06452816374 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.480839013748 0.272083759551 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148593926371 0.0996497079465 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634469672721 0.0662205650399 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261144306602 0.162205337803 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399563764224 0.0443174109184 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.2367328918 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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