TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

Based on the given set of the reading material, the writer believes that Venus' extreme conditions prevents hostpitalization of this planet. That being said, the lecturer rejects this idea by providing descent reasons that support the possiblity of acquiring floating stations distant from Venus surface which are similar to balloons which can help humans to hospitalize the Venus planet.

As the first point raised in the passage, the atmospheric pressure of the surface of the Venus is so high that it could crush anything such as spacecrafts. However, the speaker repudiates this idea when he mentions the reduction of pressure at a distance of 50 Km from the Venus surface. He believes that in that distance, not only the pressure of atmosphere is not harmful, but also it is similar to the pressure on the surface of the earth.

Secondly, the author of the passage mentions the lack of water and other vital chemical substances on the surface of the Venus. On the contrary, the lecture negates this idea by pointing out the that other useless chemical substances such as carbon dioxide, nitrogen and sulufric acid can be converted into water through a chemical reaction that can be conducted on these floating stations. This fullfils the need of carrying the water supplies from the earth to the Venus surface.

As the last point the author mentions, humans cannot produce electricity on the surface of the Venus because of thick carbon dioxide clouds that prevent sunlight from penetrating through the surface of the Venus. The speaker aknowledges that making use of solar energy on the surface of the Venus may not be possible, but it is absolutely approachable on the floating stations built far away from the surface of the Venus. Furthermore, at a high distance from the Venus surface, the floating station can absorb both direct sunlight and the light which is reflected from the surface of the thick clouds beneath the station.

To put it in a nutshell, the author of the passage and the speaker hold two opposing views against each other about the possibility of maintaining a human presence on the Venus.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, may, second, secondly, so, such as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 30.3222958057 188% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1373.03311258 129% => OK
No of words: 355.0 270.72406181 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63202319933 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461971830986 0.540411800872 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 543.6 419.366225166 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.5476762545 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.916666667 110.228320801 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5833333333 21.698381199 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06452816374 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426401161826 0.272083759551 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170294941146 0.0996497079465 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474378193163 0.0662205650399 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228536666216 0.162205337803 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552708072272 0.0443174109184 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.3589403974 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 53.8541721854 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 63.6247240618 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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