TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The author claims that maintaining human being on venus is difficult and provides some reasons. However, the speaker refutes it by saying that human can establish a station close around venus at 15 kilometers above the atmosphere.
First, the passage claims that atmospheric pressure in the planet is more higher than Earth. The professor posits this point by explaining that it's true that pressure is high at the surface of Venus but not at 15 kilometers above the atmosphere where the station is located. At the height the air pressure is equal to the air pressure at the earth surface. Therefore, the pressure cannot crush the station.
Second, the reading states that there is no reservoirs of water on Venus. However, the lecturer explains that the atmoshpere of venus is full of sulfuric acid and carbon dioxide which can be combined to generate water in the station which meets the water demand. So, there will not be any need to import water from earth.
Third, the articl claims that very little sunlight reaches to the planet. The professor apposes this point by providing that the clouds are not so thick and some sunlight may pass them. Also, there is some sunlight reflection from the venus surface to the atmosphere. Therefore, the station can collect bot sunlight passed through the clouds and reflected lights. Using both, the station can generate electericity to power their machines and equipment .

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 70, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'higher' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: higher
...t atmospheric pressure in the planet is more higher than Earth. The professor posits this p...
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Line 3, column 33, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no reservoirs'?
Suggestion: there are no reservoirs
...ation. Second, the reading states that there is no reservoirs of water on Venus. However, the lecture...
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Line 4, column 452, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ty to power their machines and equipment .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1183.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 236.0 270.72406181 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01271186441 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45785570656 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53813559322 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 358.2 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.966057027 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5 110.228320801 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8571428571 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 7.06452816374 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402204788993 0.272083759551 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133868041374 0.0996497079465 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422036794838 0.0662205650399 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225967145242 0.162205337803 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281471696801 0.0443174109184 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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