tpo 42
The material discusses the concept of stopping birds get injuried from the glass building. While the reading looks at the topic from one perspective, the listening challenges certain points outlined in the reading passage.
Firstly, the reading details specific points regarding this topic, namely repalacing the regular glass with one-way glass. Next, painting the glass with colorful designs, which permet peolpe to see and avoid birds fly through the glass. Finally, humans could create an artificial magnatic filed helps birds to go in another direction rather than the building.
Conversely, the reading challenges the points, one specific contradiction is the one -way glass could reflex just like a mirror; furthermore, this mirror could reflux the sky or trees, since birds do not understand mirror, they could fly throuh the glass. In addition to that, the coloful designed glasses have opening to let people see, so birds could see these opening as holes and fly throuh them, otherwise people should desing glass with extrem small opening, but the roon will be so darck. One final point, birds could use earth magnetic filed just fro traveling long distances; for example, traveling from cold counties to warm countriues during the winter. However, they use their eyes and the bright light to travel short distance. As a result, using magnatic senses will not have much effect.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r; furthermore, this mirror could reflux the sky or trees, since birds do not un...
^^
Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re, this mirror could reflux the sky or trees, since birds do not understand mir...
^^
Line 5, column 558, Rule ID: FOR_FRO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'for'?
Suggestion: for
...rds could use earth magnetic filed just fro traveling long distances; for example, ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, regarding, so, while, for example, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 10.4613686534 19% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 12.0772626932 17% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 22.412803532 36% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1170.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 222.0 270.72406181 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27027027027 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3642084031 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648648648649 0.540411800872 120% => OK
syllable_count: 330.3 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1688024655 49.2860985944 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.3 7.06452816374 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448367446212 0.272083759551 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164830282994 0.0996497079465 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100797670497 0.0662205650399 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290978027604 0.162205337803 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102604553483 0.0443174109184 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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