if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should get it right away rather than waiting for satisfying jobs?
Since the beginning of the current century , the concept of choosing a career has been brought to public attention. Some people believe that, they should wait for a satisfied job; however, there is a substantial body of evidence that casts doubts in this belief. From a personal perspective, it is better for people to get a secure job rather than waiting for their dreamed ones, given that working has a crucial impact on people's experience, skills and finacial situations.
The first and foremost point, provided that people start to work, they could boost their skills. For instance, in California there are a plenty of people came from developing countries , such as Egypt, Endonesia and China, hoping for a better life. These people who immigrated should start work any opportunity not only to earn money; but also, to improve their personality. To put it in another way, working hepls immigrating people to explore cultures, and gain a variety of skills, such as language, social skill. Consequently, having a job is imperative.
Next, coupled with skills enhancment, experience is another benefit of having a jod. For example, technological engineers in Silicon Valley start their practical life by woking as employees in a team work, by thime they could gain experience and promote to manager positions. Furthermore, they could add this experience to their resumes, which could help them to get better job with better salaries. To that end, they could pull up their future with a lot of thrives and prosperity. Therefore, getting a job could be a forward step to the dreamed one.
Ultimately, life has become so expensive, thereby working is not optional any more. A survey conducted by the National Association of Finance in California found that prices of rents and houses has been increaded drametically in the last three decades, which put people under severe pressure to work more hours to earn money. Given that the high cost of living, people could not afford to live without working. As a result, having a secure job is essential.
Taking eveything into consideration; without a doubt, getting a secure job is more benefitial than waiting for a satisfied one. It is suggested that people compromise to achieve satisfy/secure career balance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11621621622 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78717035571 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556756756757 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.263820423 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6315789474 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4736842105 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394399939598 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120912320684 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108764516913 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233017612814 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115541351148 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.