TPO 42 writing Integrated
Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between the glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when they try to fly through glass windows. There are, however, several solutions that responsible businesses can use to prevent injuries to birds.
The reading proposes a number of solutions to prevent injuries to birds while they fly near glass windows of buildings. However, the lecturer finds the ideas dubious and casts doubt on each solution provided by the reading passage.
First, the author argues that replacing the regular windows with one-way glass which is transparent in one direction could be a desirable substitution which enables birds to recognize the windows as solid barriers. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that one-way glasses reflect the sunlight and accordingly act like mirrors. As a result, the birds may have problems since they may see the image of the sky or trees on the glasses and fly exactly though it.
Furthermore, the reading holds the view that painting colorful lines or other designs on regular window glasses could possibly cause birds to notice the stripes and avoid flying to it. On the contrary, the professor underlines the fact that the birds still see the openings in the design and perceive them as holes. Therefore, they may fly through it. To make this approach practical, the openings should be so small that birds can't notice them. But, that design would make the rooms inside the building extremely dark.
Finally, the reading passage asserts that since birds can sense and use the magnetic field for navigation while flying, equipping buildings with powerful electromagnets which sends signals can guide birds away from buildings. In contrast, the speaker dismisses the issue due to the fact that although birds utilize the magnetic field for navigation, they usually use the magnetic field while traveling long distances. Since in the cities, the birds usually travel short distances, they don't use this type of navigation. Therefore, the artificial magnetic field of buildings will have much functionality.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...other designs on regular window glasses could possibly cause birds to notice the stripes and a...
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Line 5, column 429, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... openings should be so small that birds cant notice them. But, that design would mak...
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Line 7, column 487, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ds usually travel short distances, they dont use this type of navigation. Therefore,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, in contrast, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 294.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24829931973 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55361546012 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561224489796 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4564957585 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.214285714 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.541478038998 0.272083759551 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164537321896 0.0996497079465 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845280783435 0.0662205650399 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288741233456 0.162205337803 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495730584497 0.0443174109184 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.