TPO 46 Writing Integrated
In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
The reading passage discusses several advantages of storing patients' medical record in electronic systems over traditional paper-based format. However, the lecturer finds the ideas dubious and casts doubt on the reasons provided by the reading passage.
First, the author claims that using electronic record is cost effective since it would take no space and provides easier accessibility. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that the new method is not actually effective since even those doctors who use electronic record still keep papers for emergency cases and also for legal issues related to their duty. Therefore, even though the electronic format is used, storage costs related to keeping papers still exist.
Furthermore, the reading holds the view that using electronic medical records would cause fewer errors to happen as a result of illegible handwriting. On the contrary, the professor underlines the fact that the use of electronic record does not solve the problem since most doctors use pen and paper while they are writing prescriptions and other staff enter the transcriptions to the system. Thus, they would make a mistake interpreting what the doctor has written.
Finally, the reading passage states that electronic records can help medical researchers by providing them with a lot of data from the patients’ record. In contrast, the speaker dismisses the issue due to the fact that there is strict privacy about keeping the patients' records secret. As a result, the researchers still have to go through a long way to get strict permissions including from the patients themselves to have access to their records and some patients may even block any access to their records except for their own medical purposes. Thus, the use of electronic record would actually don't make it that easy for researchers to have access to patients' records.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 604, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...use of electronic record would actually dont make it that easy for researchers to ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, except for, in contrast, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 298.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31879194631 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69039007019 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560402684564 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6359071703 49.2860985944 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.083333333 110.228320801 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 21.698381199 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.25 7.06452816374 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.552541209999 0.272083759551 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.214817505592 0.0996497079465 216% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129329516376 0.0662205650399 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.322161577313 0.162205337803 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0937464906092 0.0443174109184 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.2367328918 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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