TPO 55 Writing Integrated
Because of climate change, more and more land that was once used to grow crops or provide food for animals is turning to dry, unusable desert land. There are many proposals about how to stop this process, known as desertification. A number of proposals involve growing trees, because trees can help protect soil and provide many other benefits to fight against desertification. Some scientists have proposed that the best way to grow trees in dry areas in danger of desertification is by using a box-shaped device surrounding the young tree. The device collects water that condenses from vapor in the atmosphere and helps the tree to grow. However, other scientists believe that this device will not be successful in fighting against desertification for the following reasons.
The reading discusses several reasons against the applicability of box-shaped devices used for growing trees in arid areas in an attempt to stop desertification. However, the lecturer finds the ideas dubious and casts doubt on the reasons provided by the reading passage.
First, the author claims that to fight desertification, buying devices for each tree would bring about a huge cost which may not be affordable for countries. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that since the devices can be used multiple times, the mentioned argument is not correct. A device could be used for a young tree and after the tree became strong enough, it could be removed so that it can be used for another tree. According to scientists, a device could be used 20 times. Therefore, by dividing the device's cost per number of the trees that it can support, the cost would seem reasonable.
Furthermore, the reading holds the view that local people's living conditions and motivation are not sufficient. As a result, they won't promote the use of such devices. On the contrary, the professor underlines the fact that other rewards can encourage local people to install and maintain the devices. First of all, the devices could bring about other benefits for these people since they can use the devices for improving the growth of vegetable. Thus, they would have more food supply. Moreover, although the grown trees don't supply food sources for the people, the branches of trees, in fact, could be used as firewood.
Finally, the reading passage asserts that the device does not have the capability to make trees survive harsh conditions. In contrast, the speaker dismisses the issue due to the fact that the devices are used to help a young tree to grow and establish long enough roots to reach water sources. Once the trees' roots have reached the moist soil, even after removing the devices, they are able to withstand harsh conditions. This idea has been proved since, in the Sahara Desert, 90 percent of mature trees survived 2 years after the devices had been removed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 524, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in contrast, in fact, as a result, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1373.03311258 126% => OK
No of words: 348.0 270.72406181 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96264367816 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52851847291 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540229885057 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3553206912 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.588235294 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.05882352941 7.06452816374 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113334168909 0.272083759551 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413646667394 0.0996497079465 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342379356275 0.0662205650399 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752730604089 0.162205337803 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220468495878 0.0443174109184 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 63.6247240618 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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