TPO 55 Writing IntegratedBecause of climate change, more and more land that was once used to grow crops or provide food for animals is turning to dry, unusable desert land. There are many proposals about how to stop this process, known as desertification.

The lecture and reading are both about desertification resulting from climate change and preventing it by growing trees using small devices. The author of the reading feels that the devices are not so successful to help trees grow. The lecturer however disagrees, saying that the problems stated for the devices are not so true and severe.

To begin with the lecture and the reading both discuss the cost of the devices. The reading suggests that the devices are expensive and since you have to grow millions of trees in some areas to prevent desertification, it will cost a lot of money. The lecturer however disagrees stating that while the devices cost money, they can be reused once a tree has outgrown a device. The same device can be used for other trees in order to help them grow.

Second the reading and the lecture both discuss installation and maintenance of the devices by the locals. The reading mentions that it will be hard to motivate the locals to look after the devices, because they work in really harsh conditions and barely manage to provide food for their families. In contrast the lecturer says that while it could be hard to motivate the locals it is possible. The devices provide water for the trees and you could motivate the locals by telling them that they can use the excess water of the devices to grow vegetables for food. Additionally once the trees have grown enough the locals can use their branches to make fire. So these factors can act as motivators for the locals.

Finally the lecture and the reading discuss the limitations of the devices to keep trees alive. The reading suggests that the devices can only nourish trees when they're small and once they outgrown the devices, they have to survive harsh conditions on their own. The lecturer however, disagrees by claiming that the trees can indeed survive harsh conditions after growing too big for the devices. Because the devices help the trees grow really deep roots and they gain access to underground waters. As an example the lecturer mentions the use of devices in Sahara desert. In which 90% of the trees could survive after they outgrow the devices because of their deep roots.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e not so successful to help trees grow. The lecturer however disagrees, saying that...
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Line 3, column 377, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...used once a tree has outgrown a device. The same device can be used for other trees...
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Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
... to provide food for their families. In contrast the lecturer says that while it could b...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 565, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...he devices to grow vegetables for food. Additionally once the trees have grown enough the lo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...an act as motivators for the locals. Finally the lecture and the reading discuss the...
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Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...the devices can only nourish trees when theyre small and once they outgrown the device...
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Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'outgrew'?
Suggestion: outgrew
...h trees when theyre small and once they outgrown the devices, they have to survive harsh...
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Line 7, column 500, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...they gain access to underground waters. As an example the lecturer mentions the us...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, look, really, second, so, while, as to, in contrast, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 1373.03311258 132% => OK
No of words: 376.0 270.72406181 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8164893617 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36591385761 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.406914893617 0.540411800872 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 419.366225166 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0280271179 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3157894737 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7894736842 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 7.06452816374 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0873185162141 0.272083759551 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363350953329 0.0996497079465 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0322061582189 0.0662205650399 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0670907266023 0.162205337803 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183343290732 0.0443174109184 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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